公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，也进行了对比，但存在明显的词汇、语法和自我纠正问题。首先直接说明你小时候更喜欢哪类公园；“perks”应改为“parks”，“trace”可能想表达“trees”，“I like I liked”应改为“I liked”。可以用“However”连接转折，并补充一个具体原因或例子。避免重复“things”和“like”，使表达更自然。

範例: No, I didn’t really enjoy traditional parks as a child because I found them a little boring. I preferred amusement parks, especially because I loved exciting rides like roller coasters and bumper cars.

建議: 回答表达了从童年到现在的偏好变化，内容方向正确，但句子结构不清晰。“what magic of is that”应删除或改为“Interestingly, my preference has changed”；“the traditional park”应改为复数或泛指“traditional parks”。建议使用“whereas”或“now”清楚地组织对比，并加入具体活动，例如散步、放松或欣赏风景。

範例: Yes, I do, but my preference has changed. When I was a child, I preferred amusement parks, whereas now I enjoy traditional parks because I can walk around the pond, enjoy the scenery, and relax.

建議: 回答立场明确，也提到了公园对城市生活的好处，但有重复、语法错误和不自然的表达。“more parks”前可加“there were”；“the city is relaxing”应改为“the city would be more relaxing”；“good for people to live”应改为“a better place to live”。建议按照“观点—原因—结果”的结构回答，并使用“because”或“as a result”连接信息。

範例: Yes, definitely. If there were more parks in my city, it would be a more relaxing and pleasant place to live because residents would have more space to exercise and take a break from their busy lives.

建議: 回答提到了家乡附近的自然公园，但没有清楚指出一个具体的公园，且有较多停顿和自我修正。“huge thing array parks”表达不清，可以改为“large nature parks”；“make people refreshing”应改为“make people feel refreshed”。建议先直接说想去哪里，再说明公园的自然环境以及你想在那里进行的活动。

範例: Of course. I’d like to visit one of the large nature parks near my hometown. It has beautiful forests and lakes, and I’d love to hike there because the fresh air would help me feel relaxed and energized.

× Actually I didn't like the traditional parks which just have the things I mean the trees, the water, the fish, or other boring things. But I like I liked the amusement park. I like all the amusement rides.

✓ Actually, I didn't like traditional parks, which just had things like trees, water, fish, and other boring things. But I liked amusement parks. I liked all the amusement rides.

谈论童年经历时，相关动词应使用过去时：like 改为 liked，have 改为 had。原句中的 “I like I liked” 是重复和时态混乱，应改为 “I liked”。另外，描述一般类别时，traditional parks 和 amusement parks 通常不需要定冠词 the。

× Yes, but what magic of is that when I was a child I enjoyed the amusement parks but now I enjoy the traditional park which has the pond, fish and other things.

✓ Yes, but what is interesting is that when I was a child, I enjoyed amusement parks, but now I enjoy traditional parks, which have ponds, fish, and other things.

“what magic of is that” 句子结构错误，应改为 “what is interesting is that”。traditional parks 是复数，所以关系从句中的 has 要改为 have。为了表达一般类别，amusement parks 和 traditional parks 不需要使用 the。

× Yes, of course. I think I think if there's more parks in a city it means that the city is relaxing and refreshing and peaceful said he, a which is good for people to live.

✓ Yes, of course. I think that if there are more parks in a city, it means that the city is more relaxing, refreshing, and peaceful, which is good for people to live in.

parks 是复数，因此 there be 结构应使用 there are，不能使用 there’s。原句中的 “I think I think” 是重复表达，应保留一个 I think。“a which” 结构错误，which 应直接指代前面的情况。live 后面需要介词 in，因此应说 “a good place for people to live in”。此外，relaxing、refreshing 和 peaceful 的并列结构应保持一致。

× Of course, I remember around my state I mean around my hometown there's a lot of huge thing array parks you know and it's always natural.

✓ Of course. I remember that around my hometown, there are a lot of huge, natural parks, and the area is always beautiful.

parks 是复数，所以应使用 there are，而不是 there’s。 “thing array parks” 不是正确的英语表达；如果想表达“种类丰富的公园”，可以说 “a wide variety of parks”。形容词应放在名词前，并按照自然顺序排列，例如 “huge, natural parks”。另外，it 的指代不清楚，因此改成 the area 更明确。

× I think it could make people refreshing and relaxed and also feel more energy.

✓ I think it could make people feel refreshed and relaxed and also give them more energy.

make 后面通常使用 “make + 人 + 动词原形”，所以应说 “make people feel”。描述人的感受时，应使用过去分词形式 refreshed，而不是表示“令人感到……”的 refreshing。 “feel more energy” 搭配不自然，应改为 “give them more energy” 或 “help them feel more energetic”。