公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接且有理由，但“outside activity”不自然，建议改为“outdoor activities”；“good for our eyes and our body”可以更自然地表达为“good for my health and eyesight”。注意使用过去时，因为问题询问的是童年经历。可以补充一个具体活动，使答案更生动。

範例: Yes, I did. I often went to the park with my friends because outdoor activities were good for my health and eyesight. We usually played badminton and enjoyed the beautiful scenery.

建議: 回答有明确观点，但存在较多语法和代词错误：“two days a week”应改为“twice a week”；“my daughter go”应为“my daughter goes”；女儿应使用“her”，不能使用“his”；“take take it”应改为“take her”。建议用清晰的因果关系连接信息，并避免重复表达。

範例: Yes, I do. I usually go to a park twice a week with my daughter. Since she spends a lot of time indoors, I take her there to get some sunshine and exercise.

建議: 回答有观点、经历和目的，但“like to see”在这里不如“would like to have”；“different place”应为“different places”，“the interesting place”应改为“interesting places”或“an interesting place”，“have picnic”应为“have a picnic”。建议具体说明更多公园能带来的好处，并使用“because”连接理由。

範例: Yes, I’d love to see more parks in my city because they would give residents more places to relax. I have visited five parks near my home, and I enjoy exploring different areas and having picnics there.

建議: 回答的主要意思清楚，但开头应为“No”；“the parks near my home is”应为“are”；“go a far place”应改为“go to a faraway place”；“cost many time”应为“take a long time”，“on the ways to drive”表达不自然。建议直接说明目前没有特别想去的公园，并用更自然的原因解释交通不便。

範例: No, not particularly. I think there are enough parks near my home for me to explore, so I don’t need to travel far. Going to a distant park would take too much time because of the traffic.

× Outside activity is good for our eyes and our body.

✓ Outdoor activities are good for our eyes and our bodies.

“activities”和“bodies”分别表示泛指的多项户外活动以及每个人的身体，因此应使用复数形式。注意：以辅音字母加 y 结尾的名词变复数时，要把 y 改为 ies，例如 body → bodies。

× So I like to go to the park with my friends to enjoy the beautiful scenery.

✓ So I liked going to the park with my friends to enjoy the beautiful scenery.

问题询问的是“小时候”，所以回答应使用一般过去时。like 应改为 liked。表达“喜欢做某事”时，like 后面也可以接动名词 going。

× It's about two days a week.

✓ I go to the parks about twice a week.

原句中的 It 没有明确指代对象，而且“two days a week”不适合直接表示去公园的频率。可以使用完整主语 I，加上动词 go，并用 twice a week 表示“一周两次”。

× I also think my daughter go to the park and worries about his eyes so I like to take take it to the park to enjoy the sunshine.

✓ I also think my daughter goes to the park and worries about her eyes, so I like to take her to the park to enjoy the sunshine.

my daughter 是第三人称单数，所以一般现在时中 go 要改为 goes。第三人称单数主语后面的动词通常要加 -s 或 -es，例如 go → goes。

× I also think my daughter go to the park and worries about his eyes so I like to take take it to the park to enjoy the sunshine.

✓ I also think my daughter goes to the park and worries about her eyes, so I like to take her to the park to enjoy the sunshine.

daughter 是女性，因此所有格代词应使用 her，而不是 his。take 的宾语指代女儿时，应使用宾格 her，而不是指代物的 it。

× I have been to five parks around my home to explore different place and find the interesting place to have picnic.

✓ I have been to five parks around my home to explore different places and find the interesting places to have a picnic.

different 后面通常接可数名词复数，因此 place 应改为 places。interesting places 也表示多个有趣的地方，所以 place 应使用复数形式 places。

× I have been to five parks around my home to explore different place and find the interesting place to have picnic.

✓ I have been to five parks around my home to explore different places and find interesting places to have a picnic.

这里的 interesting places 不是前面已经明确提到的特定地方，因此不应使用定冠词 the。第一次泛指某些地方时，通常直接使用复数名词 places。

× I have been to five parks around my home to explore different place and find the interesting place to have picnic.

✓ I have been to five parks around my home to explore different places and find the interesting places to have a picnic.

picnic 是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。固定表达是 have a picnic，不能说 have picnic。

× I think the parks near my home is enough for me to explore.

✓ I think the parks near my home are enough for me to explore.

主语 the parks 是复数，所以 be 动词应使用 are，而不是 is。主语为单数时用 is，主语为复数时用 are。

× I don't want to go a far place because it will cost many time on the ways to drive to Far Park.

✓ I don't want to go to a faraway place because it will take a lot of time to drive to Far Park.

go 后面表示目的地时需要介词 to，因此应说 go to a place。表示“花费时间”时，应该使用 take time，而不是 cost time；另外，drive to Far Park 已经表达了行车过程，不需要再加 on the ways。

× I don't want to go a far place because it will cost many time on the ways to drive to Far Park.

✓ I don't want to go to a faraway place because it will take a lot of time to drive to Far Park.

time 在表示“时间”时通常是不可数名词，因此不能使用 many。应使用 much time 或更自然的 a lot of time。

× I don't want to go a far place because it will cost many time on the ways to drive to Far Park.

✓ I don't want to go to a faraway place because it will take a lot of time to drive to Far Park.

faraway place 是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词 a。正确结构是 a faraway place。