公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and use correct past tense. Link ideas with a brief reason or example.

範例: Yes. I loved going to the park near my house when I was a child because it had a playground and lots of trees. I often played on the swings and had picnics there with my family.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence in present tense, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "relieve stress") and correct grammar.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but for different reasons now. I usually go to relax and relieve stress after work, and I like walking along quiet paths or sitting on a bench to read.

建議: Give a clear opinion and specific reasons. Avoid confusing statements; be consistent about whether you like going outside. Keep responses concise and use linking words like "because" or "so".

範例: Yes, I would. I think more parks are needed because they provide green space for exercise and meeting friends. Even though I sometimes prefer staying at home, having nearby parks makes it easier to get outside when I want to.

建議: Finish the sentence with a clear plan and give one specific detail about the park (location, features) and why you want to go. Use future tense correctly and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. In the future I would like to visit a large riverside park near my city because it has long running paths and a lake. I plan to go there to improve my running and enjoy the scenery.

× Yes, I yes I've been I've been I've been park when I was a child.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I used to go to the park.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. It mixes present perfect ('I've been') incorrectly with a past time expression ('when I was a child'). Use 'used to' to describe habitual actions in the past. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'park' to specify a particular place.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I would like to go to the park, which is really near to my house.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I would like to go to the park, which is really near my house.

The phrase 'near to' is nonstandard in this context; 'near' without 'to' is preferred before a noun. The rest is a past habitual preference, correctly expressed with 'would like to' in informal speech, but 'used to' is also acceptable.

× Yeah, when I was yes, I still like go to The park but the purpose is quite difficult different from my childhood.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park, but the purpose is quite different from my childhood.

Mixing past reference ('when I was') with 'still' caused confusion. Use present tense 'still like going' and the gerund 'going' after 'like'. 'Quite difficult different' is ungrammatical; use 'quite different'. Also 'The' should be lowercase 'the'.

× I like to go to the port for release my stress.

✓ I like to go to the park to relieve my stress.

'Port' is likely a typo for 'park'. 'For release my stress' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to relieve' plus the object 'my stress' to express purpose.

× Yes, of course actually I came from Japan and I don't like to going to go outside and I would like to stay my homes but I would like to go to the park.

✓ Yes, of course. Actually, I come from Japan and I don't like going outside; I would like to stay at home, but I would like to go to the park.

Use present simple 'I come from' for origin or 'I am from'. 'Don't like to going to go' is incorrect: use 'don't like going outside'. 'Stay my homes' is wrong; use 'stay at home' (singular) for being in one's house. Punctuation and sentence splitting also improve clarity.

× Yes especially I when when it comes to become adults I became became too like running.

✓ Yes, especially when I become an adult, I will like running too.

The original repeats words and mixes tenses. Use 'when I become an adult' (present tense for future time clause) and 'I will like running too' or better 'I will also like running' to express a future preference. 'Became became' is incorrect past form; use 'become'. Also 'like running' requires the gerund.