公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer grammatically natural, be concise, and add one specific memory or detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my family would visit a nearby park every Sunday, where my siblings and I played football and had picnics, so those outings were always fun and memorable.

建議: Use correct grammar and clarify what you mean by 'this current situation.' Give a brief reason and one concrete activity you do there. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Since the pandemic, I often go alone to get some fresh air and exercise, for example I usually walk or read on a bench to relax.

建議: Make the reason clear and avoid confusion. Provide a specific benefit of having more parks and use a linking phrase to expand. Keep it concise and grammatical.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and for families to relax; for instance, a new park could include playgrounds and walking paths for everyone.

建議: Correct the name and preposition (go to Disneyland), give a brief reason and perhaps a specific thing you want to do there. Use one linking word for fluency.

範例: Yes, I want to go to Disneyland in the near future because I dreamed about it as a child, and I especially want to visit the castle and ride the classic attractions.

× As a child, I like going parks, especially when I am with my family, with my siblings and with my friends.

✓ As a child, I liked going to parks, especially when I was with my family, my siblings, and my friends.

The speaker refers to childhood, so past tense should be used (liked, was). Also 'going parks' is missing the preposition to: 'going to parks'. Use parallel structure and commas for a list. Suggestion: use past tense for past habitual actions and include 'to' after 'going'.

× I like going to the park when we are going to bond and having a good time.

✓ I liked going to the park when we were bonding and having a good time.

Again, the context is childhood, so past tense is required. 'Going to bond' is unnatural; use 'bonding' (gerund) to express the ongoing activity. Maintain consistent verb forms: 'were bonding and having'.

× Right now I still love going to parks and with this current situation I am very fan of going out alone.

✓ Right now I still love going to parks, and given the current situation I am a big fan of going out alone.

'Very fan' is ungrammatical; use 'a big fan' or 'very fond' with appropriate article. 'With this current situation' is awkward; 'given the current situation' or 'because of the current situation' is better. Ensure correct article before 'big fan'.

× I would love to see more parks in our city because those parks were very memorable, especially those children or memorable memories for them, for them.

✓ I would love to see more parks in our city because parks can create very memorable experiences for children.

Original sentence is repetitive and uses 'those children or memorable memories for them, for them' which is unclear and redundant. Simplify the idea: 'memorable experiences for children'. Use plural 'parks' or 'parks can create' to generalize. Keep tense consistent (would love = present conditional for preference).

× Yes, I want to go in the Disneyland in the near future because as a child I dream of going there.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Disneyland in the near future because as a child I dreamed of going there.

Use preposition 'to' with 'go to Disneyland' not 'go in the Disneyland'. Also 'Disneyland' does not need 'the'. For consistency, past tense 'dreamed' refers to childhood. Use 'dreamed' or 'dreamt' for past desires.