公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense/word choice, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if you expand. Avoid unnecessary words and incorrect phrases (e.g., "as I shy", "it's very fresh for me").

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often visited Buttermonton Park because it was very large and full of trees, which made the air feel fresh and clean.

建議: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. Give a clear reason using linking words (because/so) and one specific effect of visiting parks. Keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often go because walking among trees relaxes me and helps me clear my mind, so I feel much better afterwards.

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid short or unclear replies. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "few" instead of "faith") and give a specific reason with linking words (for example/ because) about who benefits. Keep sentences coherent and limited to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few public green spaces in Bangkok. More parks would be beneficial, especially for older people who need safe places to walk and socialize.

建議: Be specific about which park and correct grammar. Mention its name or location and why you want to visit with one clear supporting detail. Use linking words such as "because" or "when" to explain timing or reason.

範例: Yes, I want to visit a large new park that is currently under construction near the river. When it opens, I plan to go because it will have walking trails and a water filtration pond, which sounds peaceful and interesting.

× Yes I like going to the park very much as I shy.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park very much when I was shy.

The student used present tense 'like' while referring to childhood; past tense 'liked' is needed (Past tense issue, ID 5). Also 'as I shy' is ungrammatical: use a clause 'when I was shy' to connect time and state. Suggestion: use past tense and a complete clause to describe childhood feelings.

× I go to the Buttermonton park it's very big and it's really fresh for me

✓ I used to go to Buttermonton Park; it is very big and feels very refreshing to me.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing. Separate ideas with proper punctuation and use 'used to' for past habitual action. 'Fresh for me' is unnatural; 'feels very refreshing to me' is correct. This fixes sentence structure (ID 26) and tense consistency (ID 5).

× Sure, I love to go in the park from that day to present.

✓ Sure, I have loved going to parks from then until now.

The original mixes simple present with a time span. Use present perfect 'have loved' to express an action continuing from past to present (Present perfect is a present-related tense issue, ID 6). Also use 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' and 'from then until now' for clarity.

× I see going the park is make me feel natural, feel good.

✓ I find that going to the park makes me feel relaxed and good.

Incorrect verb forms and word order: 'I see' is awkward; use 'I find that'. 'Going the park' needs preposition 'to'. 'Is make me' is wrong: use 'makes me' (subject-verb agreement and verb form). 'Feel natural' is odd; 'relaxed' or 'refreshed' is better. This addresses sentence structure (ID 26) and subject-verb agreement (ID 27).

× Exactly. The park in Bangkok is really faith, it's really less.

✓ Exactly. Parks in Bangkok are very few and not well maintained.

The student used 'faith' and 'less' incorrectly. Likely meant 'few' or 'rare' and 'not enough' or 'small'. Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally. This fixes incorrect adjective use (ID 13) and pluralization (ID 1).

× I like to have I like to say the many park in Bangkok in Thailand it will be good for the old people.

✓ I would like there to be many parks in Bangkok, Thailand, because that would be good for elderly people.

Awkward phrasing and wrong quantifier placement. Use 'many parks' (plural) and a clear subordinate clause 'because that would be good for elderly people'. This corrects quantifier use (ID 14), article/structure issues (ID 22/26), and noun plurality (ID 1).

× Yeah, is have the really big park in bank or is under construction.

✓ Yes, there is a really big park in Bangkapi that is under construction.

Missing subject 'there' and incorrect verb order 'is have'. Use 'there is' for existence (There be issue ID 3) and correct noun/place name; 'in bank' is unclear—assumed 'Bangkapi' or 'in the city'—and use 'that is under construction' to connect clauses. This fixes 'there be' and sentence structure (ID 3 and 26).

× I think with filter we go to this park.

✓ I think when it opens we will go to that park.

'With filter' is meaningless; likely intended 'when it is finished' or 'when it opens'. Also replace 'we go' with future 'we will go' to indicate planned action (future tense ID 7). Pronoun/demonstrative choice: 'that park' refers back to the mentioned park. This corrects pronoun/demonstrative use (ID 12) and tense (ID 7).