公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and grammatically correct with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect verb forms. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t usually go to parks as a child because we lived near the Red Sea. Instead, my family often went to the beach, where we swam and had picnics. I preferred the sea because it was more fun and less crowded than parks.

建議: Start with a clear, concise topic sentence. Give specific reasons with correct grammar and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'for example'). Avoid repetitive fillers ('actually', 'very') and be careful with tense and article usage.

範例: No, I still don’t like going to parks because they are often crowded and littered. For example, people leave plastic bags and cans on the ground, which makes the parks dirty and unpleasant to visit.

建議: Answer the question directly, then explain clearly why you feel that way with specific details. Use correct noun forms and avoid hesitation sounds ('uh'). Link ideas with words like 'because' and 'however' to show coherence.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they could reduce parking and traffic problems. For instance, small neighborhood parks would provide local recreation so people wouldn’t have to drive far and search for parking.

建議: Give a clear direct response to the question (yes/no or a brief preference), then offer a specific alternative with reasons. Use correct sentence structure and avoid repeating phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'instead' and 'because'.

範例: No, I don’t plan to visit parks in the future. Instead, I prefer museums or theme parks like Disneyland because they offer more exciting activities and exhibitions that interest me.

× When I was a child I would don't usually go to the park.

✓ When I was a child I didn't usually go to the park.

The original mixes 'would' with 'don't' which is incorrect. For past habitual actions, use 'didn't' + base verb to form negative past ('didn't usually go'). Remove 'would' here. Use past simple negative for clarity.

× We actually go to the beach and we live close to the beach because we are in Saudi Arabia, closer to the sea.

✓ We actually went to the beach and we lived close to the beach because we were in Saudi Arabia, near the sea.

The context is about childhood ('When I was a child'), so verbs should be in past tense. Change present tense verbs 'go', 'live', 'are' to past forms 'went', 'lived', 'were'. Also 'near the sea' is more natural than 'closer to the sea' in this sentence.

× So the Red Sea is.

✓ So we lived near the Red Sea.

The fragment 'So the Red Sea is.' is incomplete and lacks a clear verb and object. Rewriting as a full sentence with past tense 'lived near the Red Sea' completes the idea and matches the prior context.

× I also know I don't actually like to go to the park at all.

✓ I also don't actually like going to the park at all.

The phrase 'I also know I don't actually like' is awkward and unnecessary. Use present simple 'I don't actually like' and prefer 'going' after 'like' when speaking generally about activities: 'like going to the park'.

× sometimes if you want going to go to the park you will see it actually very, very disgusting

✓ sometimes if you want to go to the park you will find it really disgusting

Incorrect sequence 'want going to go' should be 'want to go'. Also 'see it actually very, very disgusting' is awkward; 'find it really disgusting' is the correct collocation. Use infinitive after 'want' and 'find' + object + adjective.

× people throw trash in the ground and people had also they throw actually plastic bags in, in cans and other things that doesn't allow you to go.

✓ people throw trash on the ground, and people also throw plastic bags and other things into bins, which makes it unpleasant to go there.

Multiple issues: use 'on the ground' not 'in the ground'; 'had also they throw' is ungrammatical — reorder to 'people also throw'; 'in, in cans' should be 'into bins' or 'into trash cans'; 'doesn't allow you to go' is incorrect; better: 'which makes it unpleasant to go there'. Maintain present simple for general habits.

× Yes, I really like to see a more parks in the city because, uh, parking is a really big problem.

✓ Yes, I would really like to see more parks in the city because parking is a big problem.

Incorrect article 'a more parks' — 'more' modifies plural noun, no 'a' needed. Also 'like to see' is acceptable but 'would like to see' is more natural when expressing a desire. Remove unnecessary comma and 'uh' for clarity.

× In the future I don't want to and actually in the future don't want to go in any parks.

✓ In the future I don't want to go to any parks.

The original repeats and omits the subject in the second clause ('don't want to') making it redundant and ungrammatical. Use a single clear sentence with proper infinitive 'go to any parks'.

× I actually think I want to go into a museum or like a Disneyland festivals.

✓ I actually think I want to go to a museum or to a place like Disneyland.

Use 'go to' rather than 'go into' for visiting attractions; 'a Disneyland festivals' is ungrammatical — 'a place like Disneyland' or 'Disneyland' alone. 'Festival' count should match; choose singular or plural correctly.

× This thing I liked the most because this have energetic activities in there

✓ I like that the most because it has energetic activities there.

Incorrect tense 'liked' vs present preference, awkward word order 'This thing I liked the most'. Use clear subject 'I' and present tense 'like' or past depending on context; 'this have' should be 'it has' (subject-verb agreement). 'In there' unnecessary; 'there' suffices.

× and also if you want to go to other places to the park, you can go to like.

✓ Also, if you want to go to other places besides parks, you can go to theme parks or museums.

The original is incomplete and ungrammatical ('you can go to like.'). Clarify the alternatives: 'besides parks' and give examples such as 'theme parks or museums'. Fix preposition use and complete the sentence.