公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity and grammar by giving a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and simple linking words. For example, say when you went, what you did, and why you enjoyed it. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my family to play games and run around, which made me feel free and happy. I especially liked playing on the swings and having picnics because the fresh air was very relaxing.

建議: Make the answer more organized: start with a clear statement, then add specific activities and frequency using linking words (for example, 'usually' or 'on weekends'). Correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'train' -> 'free time', 'I ride bike' -> 'I ride my bike'). Stay within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit on weekends when I have free time, and I often ride my bike or go for a walk. Parks are a good place to relax and get some exercise.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason and one supporting detail. Use correct plural forms and articles (e.g., 'more parks', 'my city has'). Mention advantages of more parks and contrast free vs paid parks briefly with linking words like 'however' or 'for example'.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve people's health and the environment. My city already has some parks, but many are small or require an entrance fee. More free, accessible parks would be better for families and exercise.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give two specific details about it (e.g., scenery, activities) and say why you want to visit. Use correct nouns and reduce repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'because of'.

範例: Yes, I want to visit the Mountain Park near my city. It has beautiful mountain views and also overlooks the sea, so I could hike and take photos of the landscape. I want to go there to enjoy nature and relax away from the city.

× Yes, I like to go into park as a site because when are you going to park so enjoyable and enjoy sport moment.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because going to the park was enjoyable and I enjoyed playing sports.

The student mixes present and past time references. The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used (liked, was, enjoyed). Also article and plural issues (park -> parks/the park) and word order are adjusted. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for childhood descriptions and pluralize 'parks' when speaking generally.

× Everyone going too far because it's so good for natural washing natural.

✓ Everyone went too far because it was so good for appreciating nature.

Pronoun and verb forms are incorrect and unclear. 'Everyone going' lacks auxiliary and tense; 'going too far' likely intended 'went there often' or similar. 'Natural washing natural' is incorrect vocabulary; replace with 'appreciating nature.' Use past tense and clearer verbs.

× Yes, yes, I still would like to go into parks because when I have a train, I'm going to park and spend my time because I have a time to Saturday and Sunday, then I'm going to and ride.

✓ Yes, I would still like to go to parks because when I have time, I go to the park and spend my Saturdays and Sundays riding my bike.

Tense and vocabulary errors: 'have a train' is incorrect (should be 'have time'); mix of conditional/modal 'would like' with present progressive is awkward. Use simple present for habitual actions (I go, I ride). Also fix prepositions: 'go to parks' and 'spend my Saturdays and Sundays.'

× I ride bike, I'm going to park and umm usually walk and I spend my time.

✓ I ride my bike, go to the park, usually walk, and spend my time there.

Gerund/verb form and article missing: 'ride bike' should be 'ride my bike.' Repeated 'I'm going to park' is unnecessary; use parallel verbs in simple present for habitual actions. Ensure articles and pronouns for clarity.

× Yes, I like to see more park in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally and modal 'would like' for preference. 'More park' is ungrammatical; correct to 'more parks.'

× My city have a lot of park like that.

✓ My city has a lot of parks like that.

Subject-verb agreement: 'city' is singular so use 'has' not 'have.' Also pluralize 'park' to 'parks' for general countable noun.

× Some park also free, Some park need to pay me to buy ticket.

✓ Some parks are also free; other parks require you to buy a ticket.

Missing plural forms and verb 'be' for 'are.' Also incorrect pronoun 'me' and verb construction. Use 'other parks require you to buy a ticket' for clarity.

× But I when I have a time, I'm going to park and spend my time and.

✓ But when I have time, I go to the park and spend my time there.

Unnecessary progressive form and extra pronoun 'a' in 'a time.' Use simple present for habitual activity and add 'there' to complete the sentence.

× Yes, one of the best part in my city is the mountain mountain park.

✓ Yes, one of the best parts of my city is the Mountain Park.

Use plural 'parts' after 'one of the,' correct preposition 'of,' and capitalize or name the park properly. Remove duplicated word 'mountain.'

× This I have a so asked so many mountain and also natural view and so also have a sea.

✓ It has many mountains, beautiful natural views, and also a sea.

Original is ungrammatical and wordy. Reorder to subject-verb-object structure: 'It has' followed by parallel noun phrases. Use adjectives correctly and remove filler words.

× So when you go into this park, I was.

✓ So when you go to this park, you can enjoy the scenery.

Sentence fragment 'I was' is incomplete and unclear. Replace with a complete clause that fits context. Use second person 'you' consistently as the sentence begins with 'when you go.'