公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap sıcak ve duygu içeriyor, ancak cümle yapısı bazen hatalı ve gereksiz tekrarlar var. Daha doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kullanın, ardından 1–2 destekleyici ayrıntı verin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve eksik biten cümleleri düzeltin. Bağlaçlar (for example, and, because) ile ifadelerinizi akıcı bağlayın ve maksimum 4-5 cümlede kalın.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I went there often with my friends to play games and make small toys from natural materials, which we enjoyed a lot. Because the parks were close to my home, we could meet after school and spend hours playing together.

建議: Cevap mantıklı ama karmaşık ve biraz tekrar içeriyor. Koşul cümlesi yerine daha direkt bir konu cümlesi kullanın ve nedenleri kısa ve net şekilde sıralayın. Bağlaçlarla (because, so) neden-sonuç ilişkisini belirtin; ayrıca zaman ifadelerini doğru kullanın (e.g., 'I don't have time to go to parks').

範例: I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely go now because I'm busy with school and preparing for the IELTS exam. As a result, I usually spend my free time studying rather than visiting parks.

建議: Cevap kısa ve belirsiz; ifade edilen fikir net değil ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Önce doğrudan yanıt verin (Yes/No), sonra nedeninizi açık, spesifik bir sebep verin ve bir öneri sunun. Doğru kelime seçimlerine dikkat edin (ör. 'in this lifetime' yerine 'in my city' veya 'these days').

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for children and adults to relax and exercise. If the local government invested in more parks, it could improve community health and offer safe places for families to meet.

建議: Cevap karışık ve tamamlanmamış; netlik ve dilbilgisi eksik. Önce kısa ve net bir cevap verin (No, not really / Not at the moment), ardından gerekçe ve kısa bir şart/olası plan ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve cümleleri tamamlayın.

範例: Not really, I don't have any specific parks in mind because visiting parks isn't part of my current plans. However, if I finish my exam preparation early, I might look for a nice park nearby to relax and exercise.

× When I was a little girl, I was going to parks really often and meeting my friends in there and playing some games, making some toys and.

✓ When I was a little girl, I went to parks really often, met my friends there, and played games and made toys.

The sentence incorrectly uses past continuous ('was going', 'meeting') where simple past is more appropriate for habitual past actions. Use simple past verbs ('went', 'met', 'played', 'made') to describe repeated actions in the past. Also 'in there' is unnecessary; use 'there'. Suggestion: Use simple past for habitual past activities and keep parallel verb forms.

× Well if I go to parks I will probably like it, but I don't have time to go parks because I have my school and I'm trying to prepare myself for my IELTS exam so I don't have much time to do activities like going to parks.

✓ Well, if I go to parks I will probably enjoy them, but I don't have time to go to parks because I have school and I'm trying to prepare for my IELTS exam, so I don't have much time for activities like going to parks.

The sentence omits the preposition 'to' after 'go' when referring to places ('go to parks') and uses 'have my school' instead of 'have school'. Also use 'enjoy them' for parks (plural). Suggestion: Use 'go to' + place, 'have school', and match pronouns/verbs to plural nouns.

× I surely do, but in my opinion we don't do activities like that in this lifetime.

✓ I certainly would, but in my opinion we don't do activities like that in this lifetime.

'Surely do' is awkward; 'certainly would' fits the conditional sense. 'We' is acceptable but the phrasing is unclear. No direct pronoun error but pronoun-verb collocation and modality are off. Suggestion: Use clearer modal expression 'certainly would' or 'I would like that'.

× So when the wants or suggestions is less, they're not doing it anymore.

✓ So when the desire or interest is low, people don't do it anymore.

The original mixes plural and singular ('wants or suggestions is less') and uses 'when' with incorrect noun forms. 'They're not doing it anymore' is informal and unclear. Replace with 'when desire or interest is low, people don't do it anymore.' Suggestion: Use correct noun forms and agree subject and verb number; use clearer nouns like 'desire' or 'interest'.

× I don't have many information about this because I'm not searching or I'm not trying to explore parks because it's not in my future plan, but if I want to. But sorry delete it if I want to add in my.

✓ I don't have much information about this because I'm not searching or trying to explore parks; it's not in my future plans. If I want to visit one, I will say so.

Multiple structure errors: 'many information' should be 'much information'; redundant clauses and an incomplete sentence ('but if I want to'). The final fragment is unclear. Fix by using proper quantifier, removing redundancy, and completing the conditional thought. Suggestion: Use 'much information', avoid fragments, and complete conditional sentences.