公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a fuller response: start with a clear topic sentence and add 1–2 supporting details (what you did there, how often, or why you liked it). Use linking words if you add details. Aim for natural phrasing and at most 4–5 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often played on the swings and rode my bike there with friends, and we spent almost every weekend outside. Because the parks had big trees and open space, I felt free and happy.

建議: Avoid one-word answers. Provide a topic sentence that directly answers and then add specific reasons or examples, using a linking word to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Keep it concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and good for exercise. For example, I go for a jog there twice a week and sometimes read on a bench to relax.

建議: Expand your answer: state your opinion clearly and give specific reasons or consequences, using linking words (such as 'because' or 'so') and a brief example to support your view. Keep it natural and avoid repeating the same phrase.

範例: Yes, I would love more parks in my city because they improve air quality and give people more places to exercise. For instance, new parks could encourage families to spend time outdoors and reduce traffic at busy recreation spots.

建議: Clarify and correct the name and give a complete response: begin with a topic sentence naming the park you want to visit, then explain why and give a brief detail (when or what you plan to do there). Use linking words to make it coherent. Avoid short unclear phrases.

範例: I would like to visit the parks in Singapore, especially Gardens by the Bay, because of its futuristic design and famous Supertree Grove. I hope to go there next year to see the light show and explore the botanical displays.

× The Singapore part.

✓ The Singapore park.

The student used 'part' which is incorrect here; the correct noun for a public green space is 'park'. This is an incorrect word choice (adjective/adverb category in the provided list), causing the sentence to be unclear and ungrammatical in this context. Suggestion: use the noun 'park' when referring to a park, and ensure word choice matches the intended meaning. Use the full phrase 'the Singapore park' or specify 'parks in Singapore' depending on meaning.