公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, and use clear linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Fix verb tenses and articles (e.g., 'the park', 'we spent'). Avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I often went with my father and grandmother to play on the swings and walk around the pond, and we usually spent an hour there every weekend.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and clearer structure. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' appropriately, and give one or two specific reasons why you go less often now.

範例: I enjoy parks, but I visit them less often now because I am busy with university studies and many assignments. However, I try to go for a short walk on weekends to relax when I have time.

建議: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a suggestion. Use plural/singular correctly and correct possessive errors.

範例: Definitely — I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few green spaces now. As a result, children often stay indoors and play games on their phones, so the local government should invest in new playgrounds and sports areas.

建議: Answer clearly and avoid repetition. Use correct verb forms and include one or two specific details about the park and why it appeals to you. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes — I would love to visit the nearby amusement park because the rides and shows look exciting. Many friends from my hometown have been there and told me about the roller coasters, so I hope to go next summer.

× We often spend a lot of time in park to maintain physical activities and enjoy their lot.

✓ We often spent a lot of time in the park to keep physically active and enjoy it a lot.

The sentence mixes present tense with past context; the question asks about childhood so past tense 'spent' is appropriate (Problem type 6). Also 'in park' needs the definite article 'the' (article error, type 22) and 'maintain physical activities' is unnatural; use 'keep physically active'. 'Enjoy their lot' is incorrect pronoun and word choice; 'it a lot' correctly refers to the park and expresses enjoyment. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense, use correct articles, and choose natural collocations like 'keep physically active' and 'enjoy it a lot'.

× It depends because when I was a child I get a lot of leisure time to do whatever I want but right now I can't do anything by my own because I have lot of work to do the works such as universities, pending works and I have to maintain my notes.

✓ It depends, because when I was a child I had a lot of free time to do whatever I wanted, but right now I can't do things on my own because I have a lot of work, such as university assignments and pending tasks, and I have to keep my notes up to date.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses; use past tense for childhood (had, wanted) and present for current state (can't). 'Get' and 'want' should be 'had' and 'wanted' (Problem type 6). 'By my own' is incorrect; use 'on my own' (preposition/pronoun issue, type 11/12). 'I have lot of work' needs the article 'a' (article error, type 22). 'Universities' and 'pending works' are awkward; 'university assignments' and 'pending tasks' are natural. 'Maintain my notes' is better as 'keep my notes up to date'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense, use correct articles and prepositions, and choose natural collocations.

× Definitely I would like to see a lot of parks in my city because in my region there are a shortage of parks, so many children's can't play outdoor activities rather they prefer online games playing their smartphones.

✓ Definitely I would like to see more parks in my city because in my region there is a shortage of parks, so many children can't play outdoor games; rather, they prefer playing online games on their smartphones.

Use 'more parks' instead of 'a lot of parks' for preference (style). 'There are a shortage' should be 'there is a shortage' because 'shortage' is singular (subject-verb agreement, type 27 and article issue, type 22). 'Children's' is incorrect possessive; use plural 'children' (pronoun/noun form, type 12). 'Play outdoor activities' is unnatural; 'play outdoor games' is correct. 'Playing their smartphones' needs 'on their smartphones' (preposition error, type 11). Suggestion: correct subject-verb agreement, plural forms, and prepositions, and use natural phrases.

× So I really want to government invest on parks.

✓ So I really want the government to invest in parks.

The phrase 'want to government invest on' is ungrammatical. Use 'want the government to invest in' (infinitive with object) (modal/verb pattern issue, type 4 and sentence structure, type 26). 'Invest on' is incorrect preposition; use 'invest in' (type 11). Also include the definite article 'the' before 'government' (article error, type 22). Suggestion: use 'want + object + to-infinitive' and correct prepositions.

× Of course, I really want to visit amusement park once because it is the only one that catch my attention and I always wanted to go there.

✓ Of course, I really want to visit an amusement park sometime because it is the one that catches my attention and I have always wanted to go there.

Use article 'an' before 'amusement park' (article error, type 22). 'Once' is ambiguous; 'sometime' or 'one day' is better. 'That catch my attention' needs third person singular 'catches' (third person singular issue, type 2). 'I always wanted' should be present perfect 'I have always wanted' to show an ongoing desire from past to present (tense issue, type 6/7). Suggestion: correct articles, verb agreement, and use present perfect for ongoing desires.

× For instance, many individuals from my region has already visited there, but I never, so I really want to go there.

✓ For instance, many individuals from my region have already visited, but I never have, so I really want to go.

'Many individuals' is plural and requires 'have' not 'has' (subject-verb agreement, type 27). 'Visited there' is redundant; use 'visited' or 'been there'. 'But I never' is incomplete; use 'but I never have' or 'but I haven't' (sentence structure, type 26). Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs, avoid redundant prepositions, and complete elliptical clauses.