公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Correct grammar (past tense, subject-verb agreement) and remove filler sounds.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my parents often took me there on weekends, and I loved buying ice cream and playing on the swings with my friends.

建議: Give a direct answer, reduce repetition and hesitation, and use correct verbs and linking words. Explain one reason clearly and offer a contrast if needed.

範例: Not usually. I only go to parks for specific reasons, such as meeting friends or exercising, because I find aimless walks too time-consuming and I prefer relaxing at home.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use clearer structure: state your position, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct article usage and plural forms.

範例: No, I wouldn't. My city already has many green spaces, amusement parks and even historical gardens, so adding more parks seems unnecessary.

建議: Be specific and accurate (Yellowstone is in the USA, not the UK). Avoid repetition and hesitations. Give one clear reason and one concrete detail about the park you want to visit.

範例: Yes. I would love to visit the Lake District National Park in the UK because I have seen videos of its dramatic lakes and rolling hills, and I want to try hiking there and taking landscape photographs.

× I can't say that I definitely love this type of leisure activities back then, however, I suppose that it was pretty fun for me because, umm, going out somewhere, especially to parks, mean the buying ice creams and sweets.

✓ I couldn't say that I definitely loved this type of leisure activity back then; however, I suppose that it was pretty fun for me because going out somewhere, especially to parks, meant buying ice creams and sweets.

Errors: incorrect tense and verb form use. 'Can't say' should match past time 'back then' so use 'couldn't say'. 'Love' should be past 'loved'. 'This type of leisure activities' has plural mismatch with 'type', so use singular 'activity'. 'Mean the buying' is incorrect verb tense and extra article; correct is 'meant buying'. Suggestions: align tense with time expressions (use past for 'back then'), match singular/plural for 'type of', and use past form of verbs to describe past habits.

× I'd say that no, really, because it actually depends on the occasion.

✓ I'd say no, not really, because it actually depends on the occasion.

Error: word order and adverb placement. 'no, really' is awkward; 'no, not really' is the natural negative response. Suggestion: place 'not' before 'really' for correct idiomatic negative response.

× However, if going there with no reason, I I'm not a big fan of, uh, taking walks in the parks because it's very time consuming and I don't really like to walk that much.

✓ However, if I go there for no reason, I'm not a big fan of taking walks in parks because it's very time-consuming and I don't really like to walk that much.

Errors: missing subject and incorrect clause structure. 'If going there with no reason' lacks subject—use 'if I go there for no reason'. Extra comma and duplicated 'I' removed. 'taking walks in the parks' -> 'taking walks in parks' (article optional). 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as adjective. Suggestion: include subject in conditional clauses, simplify phrasing, hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I just prefer stay at home.

✓ I just prefer to stay at home.

Error: missing infinitive marker 'to' after 'prefer'. 'Prefer' is typically followed by 'to' + verb or gerund; here use 'to stay'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to + verb' for general preferences.

× I think that there's already a lot of parks in my city because I don't know why we should have more because we already have bunch of parks, just green zones and amusements parks, even historical parks.

✓ I think that there are already a lot of parks in my city because I don't know why we should have more; we already have a bunch of parks, green zones, amusement parks, and even historical parks.

Errors: 'there's' (there is) with plural 'a lot of parks' causes subject-verb disagreement—use 'there are'. Missing article 'a' in 'a bunch of parks'. 'amusements parks' incorrect plural form; use 'amusement parks'. Run-on sentence fixed with semicolon and commas. Suggestion: match 'there is/are' to the noun number, include articles where needed, and use correct compound noun forms.

× Yes, there actually are. I would Li I would really like to go to the national parks somewhere in the United Kingdom because I've seen bunch of videos about national parks there.

✓ Yes, there actually are. I would really like to go to the national parks somewhere in the United Kingdom because I've seen a bunch of videos about national parks there.

Errors: filler and repetition removed ('Li I would'). Missing article 'a' in 'a bunch of videos'. Suggestion: avoid hesitations in speech transcripts when correcting, and include articles with 'bunch'.

× It has an astonishing nature views.

✓ They have astonishing natural views.

Errors: 'It has' mismatches plural 'views'—use 'They have' to refer to 'national parks' or better 'They offer'. 'Nature views' is not natural; use 'natural views' or 'scenery'. Also verb agreement changed. Suggestion: match subject to verb number and use correct adjective form 'natural' for 'views'.

× I think that it was called Yellowstone Park.

✓ I think that it's called Yellowstone Park.

Error: incorrect tense for naming an existing place. If the student is referring to the park's name now, present tense 'it's called' is correct. Use past 'was called' only if the name has changed or referring to past reference. Suggestion: use present tense when stating the current name of a place.