公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: You should give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, keep sentences concise (max 5), and use correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid unclear phrases like “every tiles can make refreshers” and “so unacceptable.” Add specific details using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”) to make your answer coherent. Pronoun reference and tense should be corrected (e.g., “the first time I went to Sidiakhana Park”).

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a place to play and relax. For example, the first time I visited Sidiakhana Park in Dhaka I remember playing on the swings and watching ducks in the pond. That visit was very memorable because I went with my family and we had a picnic. Overall, parks gave me happy childhood memories.

建議: Begin with a direct answer and then give one or two specific supporting points. Use correct verb tenses and simpler, clearer vocabulary. Replace vague phrases like “special spark” and “it was so” with concrete descriptions (e.g., “I often go to relax or exercise with friends”). Use linking words such as “because” or “so” appropriately to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit a park near my college to relax and chat with friends after classes. For example, we usually sit on the grass, have snacks, and sometimes play football, which helps me unwind after studying.

建議: Answer directly and expand with clear, specific reasons and examples. Correct word choice (use “parks” instead of “power”) and improve sentence structure. Use linking words (“because,” “for example,” “so that”) and finish sentences fully. Mention concrete benefits and specific examples of how more parks would help the community.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide space for relaxation and exercise. For example, my neighborhood only has one small park, so families and school groups have nowhere large enough to gather. If there were additional parks, children could play safely and people could spend time outdoors, which would improve community health.

建議: Provide a direct yes/no and then give one clear reason and a specific example of a park you want to visit. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use correct infinitive forms (“interested in going to a park”) and clearer phrasing (“it helps me relax”). Limit to up to 5 sentences and include linking words like “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, I would like to visit more parks in the future because they help me relax and enjoy time with friends. For example, I want to visit a large botanical garden in another city to see different plants and take photos. I hope to go there during my next holiday with friends.

× Yeah, of course every tiles can make refreshers.

✓ Yeah, of course every tile can be refreshing.

The original sentence has incorrect noun plurality and awkward verb usage. 'Tiles' likely intended 'time' or 'visit' but keeping close meaning, 'tile' singular with 'every' and 'can be refreshing' corrects structure. Suggest using 'every visit can be refreshing' for clearer meaning.

× So they would like to go a park and enjoy this moment.

✓ So they would like to go to a park and enjoy the moment.

Use of article and preposition is incorrect. 'Go to a park' is the correct verb-preposition combination; use 'the moment' or 'this moment' rather than 'this moment' depends on context. Also 'they would like' could be 'we would like' if speaking about the student and friends.

× For the first times I went international park in my country, the name is Sidiakhana in Dhaka.

✓ The first time I went to an international park in my country, its name was Sidiakhana in Dhaka.

Use singular 'time' with 'the first time'. Include preposition 'to' with 'went to', and use article 'an' before 'international park'. Use correct possessive 'its name' and past tense 'was'.

× So it was so unacceptable or so memorable things can I witness so?

✓ It was such an unforgettable and memorable experience.

Original mixes adjectives incorrectly and has wrong word order. 'Unacceptable' is wrong meaning; likely meant 'unforgettable'. Use 'such an' before singular countable 'experience' and correct adjective order.

× Yeah, definitely. I went sometimes with a special spark in my cities nearby my college.

✓ Yeah, definitely. I sometimes go to a special park in the cities near my college.

Tense and word choice are inconsistent. Use present simple 'sometimes go' for habitual action. 'Special spark' is unclear; changed to 'special park'. Use 'cities near my college' for correct plural placement.

× So when I finished after finish my college studies and then we went to we go there with my friends or spending a lot of time.

✓ After I finished my college studies, we would go there with my friends and spend a lot of time.

Original repeats verbs and mixes tenses. Use past completion 'After I finished' and past habitual 'we would go' or 'we went' consistently. Use parallel structure 'go there and spend a lot of time.'

× So it was so.

✓ So it was great.

The fragment 'So it was so' is incomplete. Provide an appropriate adjective like 'great' to complete the sentence.

× Well yes, I'd like to see more power in my city.

✓ Well yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city.

'Power' is the wrong word; context requires 'parks'. Also 'more parks' needs no article. Ensure vocabulary matches meaning.

× Parks are nice because they can give people space to relax and exercise and they make a refresh.

✓ Parks are nice because they give people space to relax and exercise, and they are refreshing.

'Can give' is acceptable but 'give' is clearer. 'Make a refresh' is ungrammatical; use adjective 'refreshing' or 'provide a refreshing environment.' Maintain subject-verb agreement and natural collocations.

× For example my neighborhood has only on small parks so if there were more places like that, family, school, spend time outside and children could.

✓ For example, my neighborhood has only one small park, so if there were more places like that, families and schools could spend time outside and children could play.

Use 'one' not 'on', singular 'park' matches 'only one small park'. 'Family, school' should be pluralized and coordinated: 'families and schools'. Complete the clause with a verb for children: 'children could play.'

× Well, I'm interested to going to going to park because it's relaxed or happier moment or spending time with my friends.

✓ Well, I'm interested in going to parks because it's a relaxing and happy way to spend time with my friends.

Use 'interested in' plus gerund. Remove duplicate 'going to'. Use plural 'parks' or 'a park' consistently. Use 'relaxing and happy' as adjectives and 'a way to spend time' to clarify purpose.

× So it is so amazing.

✓ So it is very amazing.

Original 'so it is so amazing' is redundant. Use 'very amazing' or better 'so amazing' without extra 'so'. Keep concise.

× So yeah, definitely I want to when I get sense and I want to go to a next next park in future.

✓ So yeah, definitely I want to go when I get the chance, and I want to visit the next park in the future.

Original has missing words and repetition. Use 'when I get the chance' for opportunity, 'visit the next park' instead of 'go to a next next park', and include 'the' before 'future' or say 'in the future.'

× So it depends when I.

✓ So it depends on when I have time.

Fragment 'depends when I' is incomplete. Add preposition 'on' and complete clause 'when I have time' to make a full sentence.