公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: The student simply repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. To improve, respond directly with a clear topic sentence (yes/no plus brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a place to play and meet friends. For example, I often spent afternoons on the swings and playing tag with neighborhood kids, which helped me stay active and social.

建議: Again, the student repeated the question instead of answering. Provide a direct answer (yes/no/partly), followed by a specific reason and one supporting detail. Use a linking word such as "because" or "so" to make it coherent and natural.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they offer a quiet place to relax and exercise. For instance, I often go for a jog there on weekends and sit on a bench to read, which helps me unwind.

建議: Good: you answered directly and gave a reason. To improve, remove hesitations (uh), make sentences more grammatical and concise, and add a specific example or consequence. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas and be precise about benefits for health and children.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many neighborhoods are dominated by buildings and lack green space. For example, more parks would give children safe places to play and families areas to exercise, which would improve public health.

建議: You answered the question and expressed a personal preference, but there are grammatical errors and informal phrasing. Improve by using correct nouns and tenses, avoiding repetition, and adding a clear explanation or detail. Use linking words like "because" or "since" and be concise (max 4 sentences).

範例: I would like to visit theme parks such as Disneyland or Universal Studios because I enjoy rides and spectacle attractions. I have never been to a park like that, so it would be exciting and fulfilling a childhood wish.

× they are full of buildings and there's no green areas that I think are really helpful for healthy and especially for kids to have a, a place where to play.

✓ They are full of buildings and there are no green areas, which I think are really helpful for health and especially for kids to have a place to play.

Errors: 'there's no green areas' uses singular contraction with plural noun and incorrect article; 'that I think are really helpful for healthy' has wrong relative clause and 'healthy' used as adjective instead of noun; 'a place where to play' uses incorrect infinitive structure. Suggestions: use 'there are' for plural, replace 'that' with 'which' to introduce a non-defining relative clause, use 'health' (noun) or 'healthy activities' depending on meaning, and use 'a place to play' or 'a place where they can play' for correct verb structure.

× I would like to visit automatic park like Disney or Universal for the games specially.

✓ I would like to visit amusement parks like Disney or Universal, especially for the games.

Errors: 'automatic park' is incorrect word choice (should be 'amusement park'), 'park' should be plural when giving examples, 'for the games specially' has adverb placement and word order problems. Suggestions: use correct noun 'amusement park', make 'parks' plural when giving examples, place 'especially' before the phrase it modifies, and remove unnecessary articles.

× I've never been in a part like that so I found really interesting and it's kinda A wish of a kid.

✓ I've never been to a place like that, so I find it really interesting, and it's kind of a childhood wish.

Errors: 'been in a part' — wrong preposition and word choice ('part' should be 'place'); tense inconsistency 'found' vs present context should be 'find'; 'kinda A wish of a kid' has informal 'kinda', incorrect article capitalization, and awkward phrasing. Suggestions: use 'been to' for visiting, 'place' instead of 'part', keep tense consistent ('find'), replace 'kinda' with 'kind of' or 'a bit', and rephrase to 'a childhood wish' or 'a child's wish' for natural expression.