公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, direct, and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one brief specific detail. Avoid vague words like “unexpected” here and correct noun capitalization and agreement (children).

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play on the swings and feed the ducks with my family every weekend.

建議: Remove filler sounds (uh) and correct grammar. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., usually, especially). Keep it within five sentences.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go with my friends and my sister, especially at the weekend, because we like to walk, chat and relax outdoors.

建議: Clarify your meaning and use correct vocabulary. Begin with a direct answer (yes/no), then explain with specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid unclear words and long pauses. If you mean there are few parks, say so and explain why land is used differently.

範例: Not really — my city already has few parks because most land is used for housing and businesses. Therefore, there is limited space available for creating new green areas.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific example. Use correct names and simple accurate phrases. Avoid asking rhetorical questions back to the examiner. Add a reason why you want to visit that park.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the parks in Hong Kong in the future, such as Victoria Peak Garden, because I have heard they offer beautiful views and well‑maintained walking paths.

× Yes, I think almost Children like going to parks and unexpected. Me too.

✓ Yes, I think almost all children like going to parks; me too.

The sentence misuses capitalization and omits the quantifier 'all' after 'almost'. 'Children' should be lowercase. 'Unexpected' is incorrect contextually; likely the speaker meant nothing or should omit it. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect 'me too'. Suggestion: say 'almost all children' and remove 'unexpected' to make the sentence clear.

× Uh, now I still like going to parks. Uh, I often going to, I often go to park with my friends and my sister, uh, especially at weekend.

✓ Uh, now I still like going to parks. Uh, I often go to the park with my friends and my sister, especially on weekends.

The form 'I often going' incorrectly uses the present participle instead of the simple present 'I often go'. 'Go to park' needs the definite article 'the' unless referring to any park; use 'the park' for specific/common activity. 'At weekend' is incorrect in standard English; use 'on weekends' (plural) or 'at the weekend' (British). Suggestion: use simple present 'I often go' and correct prepositions/articles.

× Actually I didn't see more parks in my country. Umm I think my uh city is uh, pastor partial and possible cities. So umm almost land uh, spent for.

✓ Actually I haven't seen many more parks in my country. I think my city is more rural and less developed, so most land is used for farming.

'Didn't see' is grammatically past but context needs present perfect 'haven't seen' to talk about experience up to now. 'More parks' is unclear; 'many more parks' or 'many parks' is better. The original contains unintelligible words ('pastor partial and possible cities'); interpret as 'more rural and less developed'. 'Almost land spent for' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'most land is used for farming'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences, choose clearer adjectives, and use correct passive/active phrasing.

× In my future, I want to this leaner land Hong Kong. Uh, is it one of the most beautiful and famous parks in the world? Umm, yeah.

✓ In the future, I want to visit Hong Kong. It is one of the most beautiful and famous places in the world.

'I want to this leaner land Hong Kong' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'in the future' not 'in my future'. For intent use 'I want to visit Hong Kong'. The question asks about parks; the student should refer to 'places' or 'parks'. 'Is it one of...' is a question to the examiner; if stating, use 'It is one of the most beautiful and famous places in the world.' Suggestion: use correct infinitive 'to visit' and clearer nouns ('places' or 'parks').