公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 시제 일관성이 부족합니다. 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용하고, 중복 표현을 줄이며 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예를 들어 주제문(Yes, I did.)을 말한 뒤 이유와 세부사항(누구와, 무엇을 했는지)을 연결어(for example, often 등)로 덧붙이세요.

範例: Yes, I did. I often went to the park with my parents when I was a child, and we usually had picnics there. For example, we would bring sandwiches and play games on the grass.

建議: 전반적으로 잘 답했지만 단수/복수 일치와 약간의 어휘 선택을 개선하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 친구들 여부를 명확히 하고, 연결어(so, because 등)를 적절히 사용해 논리 흐름을 강화하세요.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially on sunny days. I often go there to meet and chat with friends because it's relaxing and we can enjoy the fresh air, so it's a great way to unwind.

建議: 문법(‘an air’→‘the air’)과 문장 완결성이 부족합니다. 이유를 세 가지 이상 구체적으로 짧은 문장으로 제시하고, 예시 문장은 명확하게 연결하세요. 또한 불필요한 단어는 줄이세요.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide places to relax, encourage people to exercise, and help improve air quality. For example, my neighborhood doesn't have a big park, so residents have to travel far to find green space.

建議: 좋은 답변이지만 시제와 동사 형태 일관성을 다듬으세요(‘go hiking and take photos’). 또한 구체적인 장소나 활동을 하나 더 추가해 답변을 풍부하게 만드세요.

範例: I would like to visit a national park in the future because it has beautiful mountains and lakes. I want to go hiking and take photos, and maybe camp overnight; I hope to go there next summer with my friends.

× Yes, I like to.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about past habitual behavior as a child, so past tense should be used. 'I like to' is present tense; change to 'I did' to indicate past preference.

× I like going to park as a child with my parents and I go park.

✓ I liked going to the park as a child with my parents and I would go to the park.

Missing article and tense: 'park' needs the definite article 'the' and the sentence should be past tense to match 'as a child'. Also 'go park' is incorrect; use 'go to the park' or 'would go to the park' for habitual past actions.

× And take a picnic.

✓ We would take a picnic.

Fragment lacking subject and correct verb form. To express habitual past action, include subject and auxiliary 'would' or use past simple: 'We took a picnic' or 'We would take a picnic'.

× I still like going to parks on sunny days.

✓ I still like going to parks on sunny days.

This sentence is correct; present tense is appropriate for current habitual preference. No change needed.

× I often go to the park to meet and chat with my friend because it's relaxing and we can enjoy the fresh air.

✓ I often go to the park to meet and chat with my friends because it's relaxing and we can enjoy the fresh air.

If visiting with more than one person, use plural 'friends'. If only one friend is meant, keep 'my friend'. Context later mentions 'friends', so plural is more consistent.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they give people a place to relax and exercise and they make a air cleaner.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they give people a place to relax and exercise and they make the air cleaner.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'air' when referring to the general environment: 'the air cleaner'. 'A air' is ungrammatical; 'air' is uncountable and takes 'the' here.

× For example, my neighborhood doesn't have a big park. There's city so.

✓ For example, my neighborhood doesn't have a big park; there's no large park in the city nearby.

'There's city so' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to 'there's no large park in the city nearby' or 'the city doesn't have one' to convey meaning clearly.

× Well, I would like to visit a National Park in the future.

✓ Well, I would like to visit a national park in the future.

This sentence is correct except capitalization: 'national park' should be lowercase unless part of a proper name. 'Would like to visit' correctly expresses future desire.

× It has beautiful mountains and lakes and I want to go hiking and taking photos for example.

✓ It has beautiful mountains and lakes, and I want to go hiking and take photos, for example.

Parallel structure error: after 'want to' use the base verb 'take' (not 'taking'). Use commas to separate clauses. Maintain parallel infinitive forms: 'go hiking and take photos'.

× I hope to go there next summer with my friends.

✓ I hope to go there next summer with my friends.

This sentence is correct; 'hope to' with a future time reference is appropriate. No change needed.