公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Use correct tense (simple past) and singular/plural forms, and remove filler words. Use linking words only if adding details.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often played on the swings and slides, and I remember having picnics with my family under big trees.

建議: Correct verb forms and reduce redundancy. Begin with a direct topic sentence in present tense, then give one specific supporting detail (who you go with and what you do). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain briefly.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks nowadays because I take my daughter there regularly. We often spend an hour at the playground where she plays on the swings and slides.

建議: Organise your answer: state your opinion first, then give specific reasons. Avoid hesitations and unclear place names. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'and') and provide clearer vocabulary (scenery, facilities).

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because different neighbourhoods could benefit from green space. For example, parks in Bogor and Jakarta have different scenery and playground facilities, so more parks would offer varied recreational options.

建議: Be specific and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence about which parks you want to visit, then give concrete reasons (attractions, safety, scenery). Avoid vague words and correct grammar (e.g., 'they they are brush' is unclear).

範例: Yes, I would like to visit theme parks such as Universal Studios and some large public parks in the UK. I expect they will be more beautiful and better maintained, and I am interested in their attractions and safety measures.

× Yes I did. I really love to going to parks when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I really loved going to parks when I was a child.

Mix of tenses and incorrect verb form. The question asked about past preference, so use past simple 'loved'. Also 'love to going' is incorrect; use 'loved going' (verb + -ing) to express enjoyment. Suggestion: use 'loved' for past and 'going' after verbs of liking.

× The park is very fun and beautiful.

✓ Parks were very fun and beautiful.

The student spoke generally about parks as a child, so plural or generic reference is better. Using 'The park' refers to a specific park; since earlier they said 'parks', change to 'Parks were...' and match past tense. Also 'fun' is informal; 'enjoyable' can be used.

× It has it has a sliding, a swing and and.

✓ They had slides and swings.

Repetition and incorrect singular count nouns. 'Sliding' is a gerund, but the correct noun is 'slide'. Use plural 'slides and swings' when speaking generally. Remove repeated words and match past tense 'had'.

× Yes, I still like going to parks nowadays with my kid.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks nowadays with my child.

Minor word choice: 'kid' is informal but not a grammar issue; keep present tense 'still like' is correct. Change 'kid' to 'child' for formality. No tense change required.

× I have a daughter and I like to going to park to let her playing in the playground with the swings, slides and.

✓ I have a daughter and I like going to the park to let her play in the playground with the swings and slides.

Incorrect verb forms: 'like to going' should be 'like going' or 'like to go'. 'Let her playing' should be 'let her play' (bare infinitive after 'let'). Also use 'the park' for a specific park visit and correct noun order 'swings and slides'. Remove trailing 'and'.

× Yes, I'd like umm. I'm I always go to parks in my city like in Boger or in Jakarta and a different location they have a different umm scenery fives and they have different type of slides and swings.

✓ Yes, I'd like to. I always go to parks in my city, like in Bogor or Jakarta, and different locations have different scenery, and they have different types of slides and swings.

Multiple issues: 'I'd like umm' likely needed completion 'I'd like to'. 'I'm I always go' is ungrammatical; remove 'I'm'. Use 'Bogor' (spelling) and plural 'locations'. 'Scenery fives' is incorrect; use 'scenery'. 'Different type' should be 'different types'. Maintain present simple 'I always go'.

× Yes, they they are brush that I want to go to in the future like Universal Studio and parks in the UK or parks in the other countries.

✓ Yes, there are places that I want to go to in the future, like Universal Studios and parks in the UK or other countries.

Several problems: 'they they are brush' is garbled; likely intended 'there are places'. Use 'there' for existence (there be issue, ID 3) but classified here as pronoun/structure. 'Universal Studio' plural 'Universal Studios'. 'parks in the other countries' should be 'parks in other countries'. Remove redundant pronoun and correct word order.

× It's like really beautiful and more safety.

✓ They are really beautiful and safer.

'It's like' is informal and singular; refer to 'parks' so use plural 'They are'. 'More safety' is incorrect: use comparative adjective 'safer'. Also 'really beautiful' is acceptable; combine with 'and safer'.