公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: state your main point first, avoid unrelated words, and use correct nouns. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. Use simple linking words (because, and, so) and give one specific detail or memory.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because I loved being surrounded by nature. I remember spending afternoons watching different birds and exploring small paths, which made me feel curious and relaxed.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repetition and incorrect words. Mention specific activities and use correct verbs and nouns. Limit to 2–4 concise sentences, and use linking words like because or for example to explain why.

範例: Yes, I still like going to parks now. In my free time I often ride my bike or go for a run there because the fresh air and birdsong make me feel happy and energized.

建議: Respond clearly to the yes/no question then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and maintain correct verb forms. Use linking words (because, so) and provide concrete ideas about why more parks are beneficial.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for walking and cycling. More parks would encourage exercise and community activities, especially for families and children.

建議: Be specific and correct the names of places. Start with a clear statement of interest, then mention one or two reasons why you want to visit a particular park. Keep sentences short and use linking words like for example or because.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit some famous parks in the future. For example, I want to see the Grand Park in America because I have seen stunning photos of its landscapes and it seems perfect for photography.

× The service when I was younger and I preferred to go to court because I love the beautiful nature.

✓ When I was younger, I preferred to go to parks because I loved the beautiful nature.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and word choice: 'The service' and 'go to court' are wrong in this context. The tense consistency is needed (past preference), so use 'preferred' and 'loved'. Also 'parks' is the intended noun. Suggestion: start with a clear time phrase 'When I was younger,' then state preference and reason.'

× If I can, I can see the different scenarios when I go to the park.

✓ If I go, I can see different scenes when I am at the park.

The original repeats 'can' awkwardly and uses 'scenarios' which is unnatural here. Use conditional structure 'If I go, I can...' and 'different scenes' or 'different views'. 'When I am at the park' clarifies timing. Ensure present tense for habitual or general truth.

× Of course, in my country I prefer to prefer to go and when I when I have my free time I usually go to hamburger and riding a bike or going through a run among the honey birds, so it makes me feel happy and excited.

✓ Of course, in my country I like to go to parks, and when I have free time I usually go to have a hamburger, ride a bike, or go for a run among the honeybirds; it makes me feel happy and excited.

Multiple issues: repeated phrase 'prefer to prefer to' and incorrect noun use 'go to hamburger'. Parallel verb forms needed after 'usually': use base forms 'have a hamburger', 'ride a bike', 'go for a run'. 'Honey birds' likely a phrase for small birds; keep as 'honeybirds' or 'small birds'. Use punctuation to separate clauses. Keep present habitual tense.

× I do nice to make the park some work in my country because I prefer to go for a walk or riding a bike in the park.

✓ I would like to improve some parks in my country because I prefer to go for a walk or ride a bike in the park.

'I do nice to make the park some work' is incorrect. Use 'I would like to improve some parks' to express desire. Maintain parallel verbs: 'go for a walk or ride a bike' (both base forms). This corrects preposition and verb form misuse.

× So I I'd love to go to park to go for a van or lighting a bike.

✓ So I'd love to go to a park to go for a walk or to ride a bike.

Original contains 'go for a van' and 'lighting a bike' which are incorrect. Replace with natural activities 'go for a walk' and 'ride a bike'. Include the article 'a' before 'park'. Ensure infinitive forms 'to go', 'to ride' for parallel structure.

× I believe that there are many beautiful parking that many photographers and especially I I am considered about Grand Park of America, so I'd like to go to grandpas in America.

✓ I believe that there are many beautiful parks that attract many photographers; in particular, I am interested in the Grand Park of America, so I'd like to go there.

Multiple word choice errors: 'parking' should be 'parks'; 'grandpas' is incorrect for 'Grand Park'; 'considered about' is wrong — use 'interested in'. Use 'there' to refer back to the park. Also remove repeated 'I'. Maintain present tense for general belief and conditional desire.