公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, mạch lạc và ngắn gọn; tránh lặp từ và ngập ngừng. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes, I did / No, I didn't), sau đó đưa 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (thời điểm, hoạt động, với ai) và kết thúc. Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (unwind → relaxed) và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (I feel → I felt).

範例: Yes, I did. I often visited local parks with my family when I was a child, especially on weekends. We would play games, have picnics and sometimes fly kites, which made me feel relaxed and happy.

建議: Trả lời trực tiếp và hợp lý: nêu tần suất và lý do ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ để liên kết ý. Tránh âm vực do dự và cấu trúc sai (need to go into → go to; where isn't crowded → that is not crowded). Nên bổ sung một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Because I have little free time during weekdays, I usually go to a quiet park on weekends to walk or read. I prefer parks that are peaceful and not crowded.

建議: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và cung cấp lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: ích lợi cho sức khỏe, môi trường, cộng đồng). Tránh thông tin mơ hồ và lặp từ; nếu muốn so sánh với một thành phố khác, hãy nói rõ và có cấu trúc (e.g. compared to Hanoi).

範例: Yes, I would. My city is quite large and lacks enough green spaces, so more parks would improve people’s health and the urban environment. For example, new parks could provide places for exercise, relaxation and community events.

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng về công viên cụ thể hoặc loại công viên bạn muốn đến và lý do tại sao. Sử dụng thì tương lai đúng (I want to go / I will go) và tránh lặp từ. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (where, when, with whom, what you will do) để tăng tính thuyết phục.

範例: Yes, there are. I would like to visit the new riverside park next summer because I missed visiting parks as a child. I plan to go there with my family to have a picnic and try the cycling paths.

× For me, I really, I am really into going to the parks at, uh, when I was trying, uh, this is because, umm, I, uh, when I, when I went there, I feel unwind and happy with my family or.

✓ For me, I really enjoyed going to parks when I was a child because when I went there I felt relaxed and happy with my family.

The student mixed present and past tenses and used incorrect verb forms. 'am really into going to the parks at, when I was trying' is ungrammatical. Use simple past 'enjoyed' and 'felt' to describe past habits. 'unwind' should be the past adjective 'relaxed'. Also remove redundant fillers and articles. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense for childhood descriptions and use appropriate adjectives (relaxed).

× For me, I am really into going to the park now. Uh, I don't have uh, much free time, so at the weekend I need to go into the park, uh, where, uh, isn't crowded, uh, or happy.

✓ For me, I am really into going to the park now. I don't have much free time, so at the weekend I try to go to a park that isn't crowded.

The student mixed 'need to' with an intended habitual action; 'need to go into the park where isn't crowded or happy' is incorrect. Use present simple 'try to go' for regular actions. 'go into the park' is unnatural; use 'go to a park'. 'where isn't crowded or happy' is wrong because 'happy' does not describe a place; remove it. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits and choose correct place descriptions (not 'happy').

× Yes, absolutely. I live in the Tango City, so it's a large city, but it is central, but it isn't central city. And uh, Hano Central has many, uh, uh, many large, uh.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I live in Tango City, which is large and centrally located, but not the city center. Hanoi Central has many large parks.

Errors include unnecessary definite article 'the' before a proper place name and awkward phrasing 'it isn't central city'. Use 'centrally located' or 'not the city center'. 'Hano' is likely 'Hanoi' and needs correction; also finish the noun 'parks'. Suggestion: Use correct place names without 'the' and complete noun phrases (e.g., 'many large parks').

× Yeah, uh, absolutely I can. Uh, I want to go to the parks in the future when I was twice because, umm, when I were a child, I don't, I didn't went many, uh, many, uh, many, many, many, uh.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I want to go to parks in the future because when I was a child I didn't go to many of them.

The student used incorrect tense forms: 'when I was twice' and 'when I were a child' are wrong. Use 'when I was a child'. 'I didn't went' mixes auxiliary and past form; correct is 'I didn't go'. Also clarify intended meaning: wanting to visit parks in the future because of missed opportunities in childhood. Suggestion: Use 'when I was' for past time and after 'didn't' use base verb form.