公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a brief topic sentence then add one or two specific reasons or an example. Use natural phrasing (e.g. “I didn’t really enjoy parks when I was a child because…”). Avoid contractions that sound awkward and keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

範例: I didn’t really enjoy going to parks when I was a child because they felt boring and there weren’t many activities for me. For example, the nearest park only had a small playground and no space for games, so I preferred staying home.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific benefits and use linking words for clarity. Replace vague phrases like “it's a lifestyle” with concrete reasons (exercise, fresh air, relaxation). Avoid filler words such as “you know.”

範例: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now because they help me stay active and relaxed. For instance, I often walk or jog there to reach my daily step goal, and I appreciate the fresh air and green surroundings which reduce stress.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with two specific reasons, using linking words (e.g. “because” / “for example”). Avoid hesitation and improve grammar (plural/singular agreement). Be more precise about what “new things” means.

範例: Yes, I would love more parks in my city because they provide more recreational space and encourage social interaction. For example, new parks might include sports facilities or playgrounds, which attract different groups of people and help neighbors meet each other.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence about a specific park or type of park you want to visit, then add one reason or a short example. Avoid vague statements and include linking words like “for example” or “because.”

範例: Yes, I’d like to visit some botanical gardens and riverside parks in the future because they offer beautiful scenery and peaceful walks. For example, I plan to go to the city botanical garden next spring to see the flower exhibits and take photos.

× No, I didn't like to go to the park when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't like going to the park when I was a child.

The verb after 'like' can be followed by either the -ing form or to + infinitive, but in this context (habits/preferences) the -ing form is more natural and consistent with 'didn't like'. Using 'going' matches common English usage for liking/disliking activities. Suggestion: use 'like going' to express general preference about activities. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Yeah, now I like to go to the park because it's a lifestyle, you know, it's important for your fitness, you complete your steps.

✓ Yes, now I like going to the park because it's part of my lifestyle; it's important for my fitness and helps me complete my steps.

Multiple issues: use 'going' (preferred with 'like' for habits), 'it's a lifestyle' is unnatural — 'part of my lifestyle' is clearer, and pronoun/possessive errors: 'your fitness' should match speaker 'my fitness'. Also sentence run-on: separate ideas with semicolon or conjunction and use 'helps me complete my steps' to clarify meaning. Suggestion: use consistent pronouns and link ideas clearly. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I would love to see more parks in my city because, uh, every new parks have new things, new people, and it's good for interaction with new people.

✓ I would love to see more parks in my city because every new park has new things and new people, and it's good for interacting with them.

'Every' requires a singular noun: use 'park' not 'parks'. Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'every new park' requires singular verb 'has' not 'have'. Also improve phrasing: 'interaction with new people' -> 'interacting with them' for conciseness. Suggestion: use 'every + singular noun' and match verb number accordingly. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Yeah, there are so many parks I would like to go in future.

✓ Yes, there are so many parks I would like to visit in the future.

Two issues: verb and preposition: 'go in future' is incorrect — use 'visit in the future' or 'go to in the future'. Also article: 'in the future' needs the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: use 'visit' for clarity and include 'the' before 'future', or say 'go to in the future'. Grammar problem type ID:11