公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response grammatically correct, concise and add one specific memory or detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking word to add a specific example. Avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play on the swings and climb the big oak tree near the pond, which I visited almost every weekend. Those visits were my favourite way to spend time outdoors.

建議: Answer directly and give a concise reason with a linking word and a brief contrast if relevant. Use correct grammar (e.g., "they" instead of "that") and avoid filler words like "so" at the end.

範例: Not really. Nowadays I avoid parks because they are often crowded and noisy, with many children screaming, which I find stressful. Instead, I prefer quieter places such as small gardens or nature trails.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms, and support your opinion with a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" and avoid vague phrases like "everyone mind."

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they help people relax and reduce stress. For example, a small park near my house provides a quiet place for office workers to walk and unwind during lunch breaks.

建議: Start with a direct answer naming the park, then give two specific reasons (location, features) using linking words like "because" and "for example." Correct article and plural usage (e.g., "a park", "varieties of plants"). Keep it concise.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Godavari Park in Lawan Khil in the future because it reportedly has large open spaces and a wide variety of plants. For example, I heard there are walking paths and themed gardens that would be great for photography and relaxation.

× Yes, I like going to parks because when I was child there was a playful things in the park and I'm used to play that things.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks because when I was a child there were playful things in the park and I used to play with those things.

Multiple tense and agreement issues: 'like' should be past 'liked' to match 'when I was a child'; missing article 'a' before 'child'; 'there was a playful things' has number mismatch and article errors — use 'there were playful things' or 'there was a playful thing'; 'I'm used to play' is incorrect: the phrase should be 'I used to play' (past habit) or 'I am used to playing' (present state). Also 'that things' should be 'those things'. Suggestion: match past-tense narrative, use correct plural forms and fixed expressions 'used to play' and 'play with those things'.

× No, nowadays I don't like parks because there is a lot of crowd in the park and the children are screaming, crying and that little bit bothers me so.

✓ No, nowadays I don't like parks because there is a lot of crowd in the park and the children are screaming and crying, which bothers me a little.

Problems: 'there is a lot of crowd' — count/quantifier and verb agreement; better: 'there is a lot of crowd' is awkward, prefer 'there is a large crowd' or 'there are a lot of people'. 'and that little bit bothers me so' is ungrammatical and wordy; use relative clause 'which bothers me a little'. Suggestion: use 'a large crowd' or 'a lot of people' and rephrase final clause to 'which bothers me a little'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because park will helps to relax everyone mind.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks will help to relax everyone's mind.

Errors: 'park will helps' — subject-verb agreement: modal/future auxiliary 'will' must be followed by base verb 'help', not 'helps'. 'everyone mind' needs possessive: 'everyone's mind'. Also 'park' should be plural 'parks' to match 'more parks'. Suggestion: use 'will help' and possessive 'everyone's mind'.

× When the totally city was busy, only park will helps to unveil the stress.

✓ When the whole city was busy, only parks helped to relieve the stress.

Multiple issues: 'totally city' incorrect word choice and order — use 'the whole city' or 'the entire city'; tense inconsistency: sentence starts with past 'was busy' so following clause should be past: use 'helped' not 'will helps'; 'park' should be plural 'parks' or 'the park' depending on meaning; 'helps' wrong form after 'will' and wrong with past; 'unveil the stress' is wrong collocation — use 'relieve the stress' or 'reduce stress'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout and use natural verb 'relieve' and correct plurality.

× Yes, there is a one park which is Godavari.

✓ Yes, there is one park called Godavari.

'There is a one park' is ungrammatical: use 'there is one park' (no article 'a' before 'one') or 'there is a park'. 'which is Godavari' is awkward — use 'called Godavari'. Suggestion: say 'there is one park called Godavari' or 'there is a park called Godavari'.

× It is located at Lawan Khil.

✓ It is located in Lawan Khil.

Preposition error: 'located at' is used for a specific point (an address) but for neighborhoods or areas 'located in' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'located in Lawan Khil'.

× So I think there is a lot of spaces and varieties of plant which is really seen in the most of the places.

✓ So I think there is a lot of open space and a variety of plants, which is rare to see in most places.

Problems: 'a lot of spaces' is awkward — 'open space' or 'many spaces' better; 'varieties of plant' should be 'a variety of plants' or 'many varieties of plants'; verb agreement 'which is really seen' is awkward — use 'which is rare to see' or 'which you don't often see'. Also 'in the most of the places' should be 'in most places'. Suggestion: use 'a variety of plants' and 'in most places' and correct collocations 'rare to see' or 'not often seen'.

× So I believe I would like to go there.

✓ So I believe I would like to go there in the future.

Minor clarity issue: sentence mixes 'believe' and 'would like' — acceptable but adding 'in the future' clarifies intent. Not strictly grammatical error, but improving tense consistency and clarity. Suggestion: add time reference 'in the future' or use 'I believe I will go there'.