公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with verb forms and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense (e.g., "I used to go") and add one specific supporting detail. Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences) and avoid repeated filler words like "uh".

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go with my parents every weekend to fly kites, which was our family tradition. Those visits helped me relax after a busy week.

建議: Use accurate grammar and smoother linking. Begin with a direct statement, then add a reason using a linking phrase (e.g., "because" or "as"). Remove filler words and correct sentence structure ("I go to the park to jog and breathe fresh air, which helps me relax").

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I often go jogging there and breathe fresh air, which helps me relax after work.

建議: Clarify your meaning and avoid unclear words and fillers. State your opinion clearly, give a specific reason, and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Correct vocabulary mistakes ("city" instead of "CD"; "parks are old" instead of "party might say"). Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many neighborhood parks are old and small. New parks would give local people better places to exercise and do outdoor activities.

建議: Avoid excessive hesitations and be more specific. Start with a direct answer, then add a clear reason or a short plan. If you don't know famous parks, say you prefer exploring local parks when you travel and give one specific example of what you enjoy observing.

範例: I don't know any famous parks in my country, but when I visit different cities I like to visit local parks to relax and watch how residents spend their free time, such as families having picnics or people exercising.

× Yes I did when I was a kid. Uh, I used to uh, went go to the park with my parents at the at the weekend for uh, flying kites and relax after stressful week.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a kid. I used to go to the park with my parents at the weekend to fly kites and relax after a stressful week.

The student mixed 'used to' with the past form 'went'. After 'used to' the base form of the verb should be used (used to go). Also 'for flying kites and relax' is incorrect: use the infinitive form 'to fly kites and relax' or a gerund parallel structure; here 'to fly' and 'relax' are parallel with 'to'. Add the article 'a' before 'stressful week' and remove duplicate words ('at the at the'). Suggestions: use 'used to' + base verb, keep parallel structure for activities, and include articles where needed.

× Yes, of course I like going to park to like jogging and yeah, take a breath like the fresh air there is is help me relax.

✓ Yes, of course I like going to the park to go jogging and to breathe the fresh air; it helps me relax.

Missing article before 'park' (the park) and incorrect verb forms and structure. Use 'to go jogging' (infinitive) instead of 'to like jogging'. 'Take a breath like the fresh air' is awkward; use 'to breathe the fresh air'. Also 'there is is help me relax' is ungrammatical: use 'it helps me relax' (present simple for habitual effect). Remove filler words and correct verb agreement.

× Yes, of course, like you know, the party might say this is really old and I think my CD needs the new ones for for local people exercise there and like have a place to do outdoor activity.

✓ Yes, of course. Some people might say the parks are really old, and I think my city needs new ones so local people have places to exercise and do outdoor activities.

Pronoun and noun reference errors and vocabulary issues: 'the party' is incorrect; likely intended 'some people'. 'This is really old' should agree in number with 'parks' (are). 'My CD' seems to mean 'my city'. 'Needs the new ones' is incorrect; use 'needs new ones' or 'needs new parks'. 'For for local people exercise there and like have a place to do outdoor activity' has wrong word order and missing articles; correct to 'so local people have places to exercise and do outdoor activities.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pronouns/nouns.

× To be honest, I don't know, umm, I don't really know any famous parks in my country, but uh, whenever I visit, umm, a different cities, I would umm, go to the park days to uh, you know, relax and see umm, how local people, uh, spend their free time.

✓ To be honest, I don't really know any famous parks in my country, but whenever I visit different cities, I go to the parks to relax and see how local people spend their free time.

Tense and number issues: 'I don't know' is fine but redundant; 'a different cities' mixes singular article with plural noun—use 'different cities' without 'a'. 'I would go to the park days' is ungrammatical; for habitual or general future visits use present simple 'I go to the parks' or conditional 'I would go to the parks'. 'Park' should be plural ('parks') to match 'different cities'. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas for clarity.