公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子时态和形式不够准确，表达有些重复。回答应更自然直接并包含清晰的主题句与少量细节，句子不超过5句。建议使用正确的过去时态，避免重复“child/childhood”，并加上连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My family usually went there after dinner, and I played on the swings with my sisters and friends. Those evenings felt relaxed because the park was quiet and safe.

建議: 整体表达较好，但有词汇与搭配错误（如“read the air wind”），以及有些冗余。建议用更地道的搭配（take a walk, sit on the beach, enjoy the breeze），并用连接词使句子更连贯。保持句子简洁，信息具体。

範例: Yes, I still enjoy parks, but I rarely go because I'm busy with study and work. When I have free time, I usually take a short walk in the nearest park or sit on the beach and enjoy the sea breeze.

建議: 回答明确但表达稍显生硬与重复（如“add some green plants”）。建议用更自然的词汇并给出具体原因或例子，例如改善空气质量、提供休闲空间等，同时使用连接词。

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they add greenery and improve air quality. Moreover, parks provide pleasant spaces for exercise and relaxation for local residents.

建議: 回答含混且语法错误较多（如“next to it's very beautiful”，“which a famous”），句子结构混乱。建议先明确说想去哪个公园，然后提供两三条具体原因，注意定冠词与从句结构，避免重复词。

範例: I'd like to visit a park in Shanghai in the future. The park by the river near Lujiazui looks beautiful, and I want to enjoy the riverside views and the city skyline there.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

原句时态与时间状语“as a child”（作为一个孩子）不一致。描述过去习惯或经历应使用过去时，同时 park 单复数应为 parks（泛指去公园）。建议把动词改为过去式 liked，并将 park 改为复数 parks：I liked going to parks as a child.

× I remember when I was a child, my family often go to parks after dinner.

✓ I remember when I was a child, my family often went to parks after dinner.

句中时间点“when I was a child”表明动作发生在过去，应使用过去时。动词 go 应改为过去式 went，表示过去经常发生的动作。

× I often play with my friends and sisters.

✓ I often played with my friends and my sisters.

同样因为句子描述过去习惯，动词应为过去式 played。另外，如果要强调有多位姐妹，sisters 保持复数，但前句的时态需一致。建议将 play 改为过去式 played，并在 friends 与 sisters 前加上 my 以更自然。

× Yeah, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely go these days because I'm usually swamped with study and work.

✓ Yeah, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely go these days because I'm usually swamped with studying and work.

短语“swamped with study”在英语中不太自然，常用动名词形式 studying 或名词 study 的具体形式 studies/workload。根据句子现在时态，建议把 study 改为动名词 studying，使结构平行：swamped with studying and work。

× When I do have free time, I often take a short walk in the nearest park or sit at the beach to read the air wind.

✓ When I do have free time, I often take a short walk in the nearest park or sit on the beach to enjoy the breeze.

“sit at the beach”常见搭配是 sit on the beach；“read the air wind”是不正确的表达，应使用 enjoy the breeze（享受微风）或 feel the breeze。还调整为自然搭配：take a short walk in the nearest park / sit on the beach.

× Yeah, I do like to see more parks in my city because parks can add some green plants to the city, which makes them more beautiful.

✓ Yeah, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks can add greenery to the city, which makes it more beautiful.

原句中 do like to see 用法不自然，表达愿望更常用 would like to see。另：add some green plants 语义可以更简洁地用 add greenery；关系代词 which 指代前面的 city，应使动词与 city 一致，改为 makes it more beautiful。

× I think it must be Shanghai. The park next to it's very beautiful and next to a river and it's close to the Lujiazui, which a famous tourist attraction in in Shanghai.

✓ I think it would have to be Shanghai. The park next to it is very beautiful and next to a river, and it's close to Lujiazui, which is a famous tourist attraction in Shanghai.

“must be Shanghai”用于推测可以，但在回答“未来想去哪个公园”时更自然用 would have to be 或 I think it would be Shanghai。句中“next to it's very beautiful”语法错误，it’s 应为 it is，且 next to 后应接地点：The park next to it is very beautiful。缺少动词 is 在 which a famous tourist attraction 中，应加 is。注意删除重复的 in。