公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct, relevant response that matches the tense and question. Start with a clear topic sentence about your childhood preference, then add one brief specific reason. Keep it natural and within 2–3 sentences.

範例: When I was a child, I didn’t enjoy going to parks. I preferred playing indoors with toys because my neighborhood park was noisy and crowded.

建議: Answer directly and clarify conditions with correct grammar and linking words. Use one sentence stating your current preference and a second sentence explaining when you would go, with specific weather example.

範例: I don’t usually go to parks nowadays, but I do visit them occasionally. For example, I go for a walk in the park on pleasant autumn afternoons or after light rain when the air feels fresh.

建議: Start with a clear yes/no and follow with a concise reason and one supporting detail. Avoid repetition; use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve residents’ quality of life. However, I haven’t visited many due to my busy work schedule and lack of free weekends.

建議: Respond clearly about future plans using correct tense. State whether you want to visit parks in the future and give one specific reason with a concrete example of what you would do there.

範例: Yes, I plan to visit more parks next year because they help me relax. For instance, I want to find a quiet park where I can read for an hour and take short walks to reduce stress.

× No, I don't like, I don't like to go to park as a child because I'm not a child anymore.

✓ No, I didn't like going to parks as a child because I am not a child anymore.

This sentence mixes present and past ideas and has article and verb form issues. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense: 'didn't like.' Use the gerund 'going' after 'like.' Use the plural 'parks' or include the article 'the' for 'park.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent when describing past habits (e.g., 'I didn't like going to parks as a child').

× No, I don't like but if sometime the monsoon or the weather is good so I I want to go according to the weather conditions.

✓ No, I don't like going to parks, but sometimes when the monsoon or the weather is good, I want to go depending on the weather conditions.

This sentence has awkward connectors and wrong adverb forms. Use 'sometimes' instead of 'sometime' for frequency. Use 'going to parks' as the gerund after 'like.' Remove extra 'so' and duplicate 'I.' Use 'when' to introduce the condition and 'depending on' for 'according to.' Suggestion: Simplify clauses and keep modal/conditional structure clear (e.g., 'but sometimes when the weather is good, I go').

× Yes, I want to explore more parks in my city but due to the shortage of time and I'm not able to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I want to explore more parks in my city, but due to a shortage of time, I'm not able to visit many of them.

The original repeats ideas and misuses 'due to' without an article. Use 'a shortage of time' and avoid repetition of 'in my city' and 'see more parks.' Use 'visit' and 'many of them' for clarity. Suggestion: Combine ideas concisely and avoid repeating the same phrase.

× Yes, I did go to the park in the future because in the park.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to parks in the future because in parks

The original incorrectly mixes past tense 'did go' with 'in the future.' For future intentions use 'would like to' or 'want to' or 'will.' Also 'to the park' is too specific; plural 'parks' fits context. Suggestion: Use correct future modal forms for intentions, e.g., 'I would like to go to parks in the future.'

× In the park I feel relaxed and it feels me, it feel me, it feel me make comfortable but.

✓ In the park I feel relaxed; it makes me feel comfortable.

The original uses incorrect word order and wrong pronoun/verb combination: 'it feels me' is incorrect in English. The correct structure is 'it makes me feel...' or 'it makes me comfortable.' Remove trailing 'but.' Suggestion: Use correct causative structure 'make + object + adjective' (e.g., 'it makes me feel comfortable').