公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cümleleri daha doğal ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru kurmaya odaklanmalısınız. Kısa, doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, and) kullanarak akışı iyileştirin ve ‘park’ kelimesinin başına doğru artikel(“the” veya “a”) ekleyin. Ayrıca doğal zaman uyumuna dikkat edin: geçmişten bahsederken geçmiş zaman kullanın (liked, enjoyed).

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were safe places to play with my friends. For example, I used to spend whole afternoons on the swings and playing tag, which made me very happy.

建議: Cevabınızda çelişki ve dilbilgisi hataları var; daha açık ve mantıklı bir yapı kullanın. Önce doğrudan cevap verin (Yes/No), sonra sebebinizi belirtin ve örnek veya kısa açıklama ekleyin. Zaman uyumunu koruyun ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın. Ayrıca “childish” gibi kelimeleri kullanırken nedenini açıklayın (e.g. noisy, crowded).

範例: Not really. I rarely go to parks now because I find them crowded and noisy. For instance, when I visited one last year it was difficult to relax because there were many loud groups and no quiet areas.

建議: Daha net ve düzgün cümlelerle fikrinizi destekleyin. Başlangıçta kısa bir konu cümlesi kullanın, sonra gerekçenizi açıklayın ve mümkünse bir örnek veya sonuç ekleyin. Dilbilgisi için ‘children need’ ve ‘play games’ gibi doğru ifadeleri kullanın. Ayrıca eksik biten cümlelerden kaçının.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and for families to relax. For example, a new small park with benches and a playground would encourage people to spend time outdoors and improve community life.

建議: Cevabı daha organize ve gramatik olarak doğru hale getirin. Net bir plan veya tercih belirtin (e.g. I would like to visit large national parks in the US). Tekrarlardan kaçının ve doğru kelime sırasını, artikelleri ve zamanları kullanın. Birkaç kısa ayrıntı (neresi, ne yapmak istediğiniz) ekleyin.

範例: I would like to visit large national parks in the United States, such as Yellowstone, so I can go cycling and enjoy nature. I also hope to visit well-known parks in Europe, like Hyde Park in London, to walk and relax.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The speaker refers to a past habitual action ('as a child'), so the past tense 'liked' is required; also 'park' should be plural or have an article: 'parks' or 'the park'. Use 'liked' and 'parks' to match meaning. Suggestions: use past tense for childhood habits and include plural or article: 'I liked going to parks' or 'I liked going to the park.'

× It's very enjoyed and I love being in park.

✓ I enjoyed it very much, and I loved being in the park.

'Enjoyed' is a verb and requires a subject; 'It's very enjoyed' is incorrect. Use 'I enjoyed it very much' for past enjoyment. 'Being in park' needs the definite article 'the park'. Also match past tense 'loved' with 'as a child.' Suggestions: form a proper subject-verb phrase and include articles: 'I enjoyed it very much' and 'the park.'

× No I don't like going to parks now because it's like childish and I when I went a park it's makes me bored.

✓ No, I don't like going to parks now because it feels childish, and when I go to a park it makes me bored.

The sentence mixes tenses. The first clause correctly uses present tense 'don't like' for current preference. Use 'feels childish' (adjective 'childish' with verb 'feel') and maintain present simple for habitual result: 'when I go to a park it makes me bored.' Also use article 'a park' and remove extra words. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it makes.' Suggestions: keep present tense consistent for current habits: 'it feels childish' and 'when I go to a park, it makes me bored.'

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

The question asks about desire; 'I like to see' is grammatical but sounds odd for a wish. Use a modal expression 'would like' to express preference for future/additional parks. This fits the context of wanting more parks. Suggestions: use 'would like' for polite preference: 'I would like to see more parks.'

× I think children are need to play a games in the park.

✓ I think children need to play games in the park.

'Are need' is incorrect; use 'need' directly with the subject. 'A games' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'games' without 'a'. Also remove unnecessary article before 'park' or use 'the park.' Suggestions: use correct verb form 'need' and match noun number: 'children need to play games in the park.'

× In my city, parks are very.

✓ In my city, there are many parks, and they are very nice.

The original sentence is incomplete ('parks are very' needs an adjective). Also use 'there are' to state existence and 'many' as quantifier if intended; then add an adjective such as 'nice'. Suggestions: complete the idea by adding a quantifier and adjective: 'There are many parks' and describe them: 'they are very nice.'

× Maybe in America I want to go a big parks and bike bicycles.

✓ Maybe in America I want to visit big parks and ride bicycles.

'Go a big parks' mixes verb, article, and pluralization errors. Use 'visit' for going to places, remove incorrect article before plural 'parks', and use 'ride bicycles' or 'ride a bicycle'. 'Bike' as a verb is informal; use 'ride' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'visit' + plural noun without 'a', and 'ride bicycles' or 'ride a bicycle.'

× In other ways I want to I want to. Went park in Europe's OC too.

✓ Also, I want to visit parks in Europe too.

This pair of fragments is ungrammatical and repetitive. 'I want to I want to.' is redundant, and 'Went park in Europe's OC' is incorrect word order and tense. Use 'I want to visit parks in Europe too' to express future desire. Use present infinitive 'to visit' after 'want'. Suggestions: remove repetition and use correct infinitive: 'I want to visit parks in Europe too.'