公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và chính tả, sử dụng thì và số nhiều chính xác; rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi như "day" thay vì "days". Thêm liên từ ngắn để câu mạch lạc hơn và giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu.

範例: Yes, I did. I often went to a small park near our house where my parents and I played football or badminton almost every weekend. Those days I felt very happy and energetic because I could play outdoors with my family.

建議: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp số nhiều và danh từ, dùng động từ phù hợp và liên từ để kết nối ý. Tránh câu rời rạc bằng cách liên kết ý về lợi ích và nỗi sợ với cấu trúc rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. They give me plenty of space to play sports such as football and to go for a run. However, I am a bit afraid of large dogs, so I usually avoid areas where people bring them.

建議: Chú ý từ vựng chính xác và collocation (ví dụ "authorities" thay vì "arteries"). Nên dùng liên từ để nêu ý trái ngược và giải thích cụ thể hơn về đề xuất cải thiện. Giữ câu ngắn, rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they give people places to meet, exercise and relax. However, many of the existing parks are poorly maintained and full of litter, so the local authorities should improve cleaning and maintenance.

建議: Chú ý ngữ pháp câu và lựa chọn từ, sửa lỗi như "Is look" và dùng danh từ số nhiều/định từ đúng ("stray dogs"). Nên dùng liên từ để nối mong muốn với lo ngại và đề xuất cải thiện rõ ràng hơn.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit a large park near my college that has a big football pitch in the center. It looks ideal for playing and relaxing, but I am worried about stray dogs and cleanliness. Therefore, I hope the park managers will keep it cleaner in the future.

× I love those day because I felt happy and active playing outdoors.

✓ I loved those days because I felt happy and active playing outdoors.

The speaker refers to past habitual feelings and times; 'love' is present tense and 'day' is singular. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'When I was a child' and plural 'days' for repeated occasions. Suggestions: change 'love' to 'loved' and 'day' to 'days'.

× Park give me plenty of place to play sports like football and run.

✓ Parks give me plenty of places to play sports like football and to run.

The subject should agree with the verb: if singular 'park gives', plural 'parks give'. Also 'place' should be plural 'places' for multiple activities, and 'run' needs 'to' or gerund 'running'. Suggestions: use 'Parks give' or 'A park gives', use 'places', and use 'to run' or 'to go running'.

× But I'm a bit afraid of large dogs so I usually avoid areas where people bring dogs.

✓ But I'm a bit afraid of large dogs, so I usually avoid areas where people bring dogs.

A comma is required before the coordinating conjunction 'so' connecting independent clauses. This is punctuation/structure; also sentence is otherwise correct. Suggestions: add a comma before 'so' to improve clarity.

× However, many existing parks are poorly maintained and have a lot of litter, so the arteries should improve cleaning.

✓ However, many existing parks are poorly maintained and have a lot of litter, so the authorities should improve cleaning.

'Arteries' is the wrong word; the intended meaning is 'authorities' (people responsible). This is a lexical/pronoun-like choice error. Suggestions: replace 'arteries' with 'authorities'.

× Is look ideal for playing and relaxing until I worry about stray dog and cleanliness.

✓ It looks ideal for playing and relaxing, but I worry about stray dogs and cleanliness.

Sentence begins with 'Is' incorrectly; subject 'It' with verb 'looks' is needed. 'Until' is wrong connector; 'but' contrasts. 'dog' should be plural 'dogs'. Also punctuation: comma before 'but'. Suggestions: start with 'It looks', use 'but' for contrast, pluralize 'dogs'.

× So I hope the park manager will keep it cleaner in the future.

✓ So I hope the park manager will keep it cleaner in the future.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. The modal 'will' expresses future expectation; no change needed. Suggestions: sentence is fine as is; alternatively 'will keep it cleaner' could be 'keeps it cleaner' to express hope for habitual action.