公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (tense and articles), reduce repetition, and make the answer more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word (e.g., “and” or “because”). Avoid filler words and repeated phrases.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because I enjoyed looking at the flowers and playing games with my friends. For example, we often played soccer and took turns on the swings, which made weekend afternoons very fun.

建議: Use present tense correctly and avoid redundancy. Give a clear topic sentence in present simple, then add a specific activity and where/when you do it. Use linking words like “especially” and “because” properly, and finish the sentence fully.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park near my house, especially in the mornings. I often read my favorite novels on a bench there because the quiet atmosphere helps me concentrate.

建議: Avoid repetition of reasons and fix small errors. Provide one clear reason then expand briefly with a specific example or effect, using linking words such as “because” and “so” to connect ideas coherently.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because seeing children play reminds me of my childhood and helps me relax. For example, a new neighborhood park would provide families with a safe place to meet and enjoy outdoor activities.

建議: Be specific about which parks you mean and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to explain reasons and give one concrete detail about what you want to see or do there. Keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit parks in France, such as the Luxembourg Gardens in Paris, because they look beautiful and spacious. I hope to stroll through the gardens and see historic sculptures and well-kept flowerbeds.

× Yes, I really like to go parks when I was little because there I like to see many flowers and I I had many fun of playing with my friends like playing soccer or doing high.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to parks when I was little because I liked to see many flowers and I had a lot of fun playing with my friends, like playing soccer or doing high jumps.

Mixed present and past tense: the speaker refers to childhood, so past tense should be used consistently. Use 'liked' not 'like', use the gerund 'going' after 'liked', use 'a lot of fun' instead of 'many fun', and correct 'doing high' to 'doing high jumps' for clarity.

× Yes, I still love to going parks especially near my house parks. I enjoyed reading my favorite novels in the park and and I also like to go there in.

✓ Yes, I still love going to parks, especially the ones near my house. I enjoy reading my favorite novels in the park, and I also like to go there often.

After 'love' use the gerund 'going', not the infinitive with to. Use 'go to parks' with preposition 'to'. 'I enjoyed' (past) conflicts with present 'still love' so use present 'enjoy'. Remove duplicate 'and', complete the unfinished phrase 'go there often'.

× Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my cities because I really like to see children playing in the park because that makes me remem, that reminds me of my childhood, and it helps me relax.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because I really like to see children playing in the park; that reminds me of my childhood and helps me relax.

Use singular 'city' to match the speaker's location. Remove redundant clause 'because that makes me remem, that' and replace with 'that reminds me'. Use punctuation to avoid run-on sentence.

× Yes, I want to go to foreign parks, such as parks in France or other European countries, because I see them very special and they are so large and I want to.

✓ Yes, I want to visit parks in other countries, such as in France or other European countries, because I find them very special and large, and I want to go there.

Use 'visit' or 'go to' for clarity. 'See them very special' is incorrect; use 'find them very special'. Complete the unfinished clause 'and I want to' to 'and I want to go there'. Use 'other countries' instead of 'foreign parks' for natural phrasing.