公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更有条理并使用正确时态。开头用一句明确的主题句（肯定或否定），接着用1–2个具体细节支持，避免重复和犹豫词（如 umm、you know）。注意儿童时期应使用过去时（e.g. I liked）。可以把活动分类（安静活动 vs. 运动），并用连接词（for example, also）使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played chess with my friends on the benches and also practised football on the open ground with my teammates. For example, we would meet every Saturday afternoon to practice shooting and passing.

建議: 回答需更简洁、用词准确并去掉重复。用现在时描述现在的习惯，避免无意义的重复（例如“confused. Confused.”）。给出具体频率或原因可增加说服力（e.g. after work, twice a week）。并使用连接词（because, so）说明原因。

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. As an adult, I often walk there for about half an hour after work to relax and clear my mind, because it helps me reduce stress and stay active.

建議: 回答需更明确并提供具体理由和对比。避免含糊和重复（如“my in my in my”），用准确表达描述城市现状（e.g. tall modern buildings, few parks）。说明为什么需要更多公园并举例好处（health, environment, community）。短句清晰有力。

範例: Yes, definitely. My city is full of tall, modern buildings but has very few parks. I would like more green spaces because they improve air quality, provide places for exercise and help build a sense of community.

建議: 回答应更具体并用正确表达说明偏好。去掉填充词（umm, uh）和重复，使用明确的名词短语（parks with lakes and bike paths）并可说明原因或计划（e.g. to cycle or relax by the lake）。保持一到两句的长度。

範例: Yes, I would like to visit parks that have a lake and dedicated bike paths. I enjoy cycling and spending time by the water, so a park with those features would be perfect for weekend outings.

× Sometimes I like to play chess with my friends and you know, there is a ground, umm, in the Central Park and the way I like to playing, I like to play football with my teammates and to practice.

✓ Sometimes I liked to play chess with my friends, and there was a ground in Central Park. I also liked playing football with my teammates and practicing.

原句中“I like to playing”使用了動詞不定式與現在分詞混用，屬於動詞＋-ing形式錯誤。此處句子描述的是過去的經歷，時態應與開頭“Yes, I did.”一致，用過去式或過去習慣“liked/liked playing”。建議：當動詞後接動名詞時使用動詞＋-ing（liked playing），若使用不定式則用 to + 動詞原形（like to play）。此外將長句拆成兩句更清晰。

× Yes I do. You know I'm a adult now in the uh during my work. I feel so confused. Confused. I like to go to a park to hang out or wo walk off work for like half an hour.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm an adult now, and during my work I often feel confused. I like to go to a park to hang out or to walk after work for about half an hour.

原句存在現在時態和冠詞使用問題（a adult 應為 an adult）以及不正確的詞序和拼寫（wo walk）。“during my work”表達不自然，改為“during my work I often feel confused”或更常見“after work”來表達下班後。建議：注意 a/an 的使用規則（以發音為準），檢查單詞拼寫，並使用恰當的時間短語（after work）。

× Yes, definitely. You know my in my in my cities, in my city tall like the modern buildings are everywhere, but uh, parks are very lazy. Uh, this number.

✓ Yes, definitely. In my city, tall modern buildings are everywhere, but there are very few parks.

原句有代詞和表達混亂問題（“my in my in my cities”與“this number”不明確），屬於代詞和句子結構錯誤。應簡化為“In my city”並用“there are very few parks”來表達數量稀少。建議：避免重複短語，使用清晰的代詞或名詞短語，若描述數量用 few/very few 等量詞搭配名詞。

× Umm, well, I like to go some, umm, some, some some parks where have uh lake and uh ha had a ride, had had a way to ride, ride a bike.

✓ Umm, well, I like to go to some parks that have a lake and where I can ride a bike.

原句中“parks where have a lake”為 there be 結構使用不當，正確應為“parks that have a lake”或“parks where there is a lake”。另外“like to go some”缺少介詞“to”。重複的詞和不正確的過去式（had had）也應刪除。建議：學習常用的關係子句結構（that have / where there is），並確保動詞形式和介詞完整。