公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 用更自然和连贯的句子直接回答问题，避免语法错误和不必要的重复；补充具体细节（例如常玩的游戏、频率或与谁一起），并使用连接词使表达更流畅。可以将回答控制在最多五句内。

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went there with my neighbours and we often played hide-and-seek or climbed trees. We went almost every weekend, especially in the summer, and sometimes had picnics with our families. Those times felt very free and memorable.

建議: 回答时避免重复相同表达，使用连词解释原因并给出具体例子（如一次典型的公园活动或时间安排）。保持句子简洁并注意冠词和单复数。

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me recharge and relax. However, I rarely visit them now due to work commitments; for example, I usually only manage a short walk in the park on Sunday mornings. When I do go, I like to sit and read or do some light exercise.

建議: 直接陈述观点后用具体理由支持，避免模糊或冗余词（如 anyway）。可加入比较或举例说明哪类公园更需要以及如何改善城市生活。

範例: Definitely. More parks would improve air quality and provide safe spaces for exercise and socialising. For instance, small neighbourhood parks with playgrounds and walking paths would benefit families and elderly residents. Overall, adding greenery would make the city healthier and more pleasant.

建議: 回答时说清楚具体原因，避免口头赘词（如 well）和重复表达。用一两句描述具体吸引你的特色（景观、设施或活动），并用连接词把理由组织起来。

範例: Yes, I'd love to visit Beijing Olympic Forest Park. I am drawn to its expansive landscapes and well-designed walking trails, which make it ideal for long walks and photography. Every time I visit I feel calm and refreshed because the park is peaceful and full of greenery.

× Yes. When I was little I didn't have my own smartphone, so the leisure made.

✓ Yes. When I was little I didn't have my own smartphone, so we made our own leisure.

句子结构不完整且用词不当。“the leisure made”不是英语常用表达，缺少主语和动词搭配。建议把意思表达为“我们自己制造娱乐/消遣”，可用 make leisure 或更自然的短语 make our own fun 或 make our own entertainment；此处改为 “we made our own leisure” 更符合句子结构但更地道是 “we made our own fun”。使用简洁完整的主谓结构。

× The main activity was hanging out with my friends to the park and we used to play hide I think, or just walked around.

✓ The main activity was hanging out with my friends at the park; we used to play hide-and-seek, I think, or just walk around.

错误用介词“to the park”应为表示在公园的活动用 at the park。动词时态和形式也不一致：并列动作应使用相同形式（used to play / walk，而不是 used to play / walked）。“hide”应为短语 hide-and-seek 表示捉迷藏。建议确保介词、时态和并列结构一致。

× Yes, I really enjoy going to park since it's a great chance to recharge my batteries and unwind.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy going to the park since it's a great chance to recharge my batteries and unwind.

名词 park 前需要定冠词 the，表示去公园这一活动的习惯性说法是 going to the park。省略冠词会造成不地道或不完整。建议熟记固定搭配如 go to the park/ go to school（部分情形）等。

× But I have a busy life so I seldom go to park right now even though I still enjoy going to park.

✓ But I have a busy life so I seldom go to the park right now even though I still enjoy going to the park.

同上，重复出现的 “go to park” 均缺少定冠词 the。习惯性去某处作活动时通常用 go to the [place]。建议在类似句子中统一使用定冠词。

× Definitely, yes. Parks can improve the air quality of the city, and besides, it's a great place for people to work out and socialize.

✓ Definitely, yes. Parks can improve the air quality of the city, and besides, they're great places for people to work out and socialize.

原句在后半句用单数不一致（it’s a great place）但主语泛指复数 parks，主谓一致应为 they are great places，或改为 The park is a great place。如果想泛指“公园通常是很好的地方”，应保证主语和谓语及名词单复数一致。建议检查主语复数时谓语和名词也用复数。

× Yes, the park is Beijing Olympic Forest Park.

✓ Yes, the park is the Beijing Olympic Forest Park.

专有名词前有时需要定冠词 the，特别是包含地名和特定公园名时常用 the Beijing Olympic Forest Park。根据习惯用法加上定冠词更自然。

× Well, I can't see the exact reason.

✓ Well, I can't say the exact reason.

“can't see the exact reason” 在语境中不自然，母语者更常说 can't say the exact reason 或 don't know the exact reason。建议使用更自然的表达以传达“我说不出确切的原因”。

× I just feel the vibe and the landscape in the park is stunning and imposing.

✓ I just feel the vibe, and the landscape in the park is stunning and impressive.

用词不当：imposing 意味着壮观但常有压迫感，语境中用 impressive 更为中性和常用。句子也缺少连词或标点来分隔两部分，建议用 and 连接并保持形容词选择恰当。

× Well, every time I went there I can feel, I can feel a sense of inner peace.

✓ Well, every time I go there I can feel a sense of inner peace.

时态混用：先用过去式 went 又用现在时 can feel，应保持时态一致。若表示习惯性动作应用一般现在时 every time I go there I can feel...；若要表达过去经历则全部用过去时（every time I went there I could feel...）。建议根据要表达的时间选择并统一时态。