公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer grammatically correct and more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb tense (use past tense for childhood). Use linking words like "because" or "as" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. I loved going to parks when I was a child because I often went there with my friends, and we played games and had picnics which was very relaxing and fun.

建議: Use correct verb forms and simplify your sentences. Give a clear topic sentence in present tense, then add a specific reason or example. Avoid repeating phrases and make the supporting detail concise and coherent using linking words like "because" or "so".

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go there when I have free time because being outdoors with friends helps me relax and reduces stress.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant. Improve it by starting with a direct topic sentence and refining language (singular/plural agreement, concise phrasing). Add a brief linking phrase and one concrete example to make it more specific.

範例: Yes, I would. More parks in the city would give children safe places to play and help families relax without spending much money; for example, parents could take kids to playgrounds or morning exercise sessions.

建議: Make the response more grammatically correct and specific. State the park and one or two clear reasons you want to visit, using correct vocabulary (e.g., "attractive," "popular," "tourists"). Avoid vague phrases and correct word order and tense.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit our City Park in the future because it is very attractive and popular. Many tourists visit it, and I want to see the gardens and fountains that people often praise.

× Then of course I like to go.

✓ Then of course I liked to go.

The question asks about childhood habits (past), so the student should use past tense. Change 'like' to past 'liked' to match the time frame and maintain tense consistency.

× I like going to parks when I was a child because I I went to there with my friends and it's good, good relaxing and enjoyful for me.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child because I went there with my friends and it was relaxing and enjoyable for me.

Multiple issues: 'going' is fine but the main tense should be past ('liked') to match 'when I was a child'. 'I went to there' is incorrect preposition order; use 'went there'. 'It's good, good relaxing and enjoyful' mixes present tense with past and uses incorrect adjective 'enjoyful' and awkward phrasing. Use past 'it was relaxing and enjoyable'. Suggestions: keep past tense throughout, use correct adjective 'enjoyable', and place 'there' after the verb 'went'.

× Obviously I loves I loves to go parks nowadays because of whenever I go to park then I feel relaxed and it's feel me very relaxing or stress free whenever I get free time the time I went there with my friends and some.

✓ Obviously I love to go to parks nowadays because whenever I go to a park I feel relaxed and stress-free; I usually go there with my friends when I have free time.

'I loves' is incorrect third-person singular form; first-person singular uses 'I love'. 'To go parks' needs the preposition 'to go to parks' or 'go to a park'. 'It's feel me' is ungrammatical; use 'I feel' or 'it makes me feel'. 'Stress free' should be hyphenated as 'stress-free'. The sentence is long and disorganized; break into clearer clauses and maintain present tense for current habits.

× Yes I would, when there are more parks in the city, children can enjoy quality time outdoors, play safely and meet friends, and also park gives families a low cost place to relax and exercise.

✓ Yes, I would. When there are more parks in the city, children can enjoy quality time outdoors, play safely, and meet friends, and parks also give families a low-cost place to relax and exercise.

'Park gives' should be plural 'parks give' to agree with 'there are more parks'. 'Low cost' should be hyphenated as 'low-cost' when used as a compound adjective. Minor punctuation fixes: separate responses and use commas. Maintain plural agreement.

× Yes, I want to go in our City Park in the future because there's very eye-catching parks and it's very popular.

✓ Yes, I want to go to our City Park in the future because there are very eye-catching parks and it is very popular.

Use 'go to' not 'go in' for visiting a park. 'There's very eye-catching parks' mixes singular 'there's' with plural 'parks'; use 'there are'. 'It's' is acceptable contracted 'it is', but plural agreement for 'parks' is required.

× The many visitors come from foreign they visit visited the this park.

✓ Many visitors come from foreign countries; they visit this park.

This sentence has tense and word-order errors. 'The many visitors' should be 'Many visitors'. 'From foreign' is incomplete; use 'from foreign countries' or 'from abroad'. Remove the duplicate verb forms 'visit visited' and incorrect article 'the this'. Use present simple 'come' and 'visit' if describing a general fact. If referring to past visits, use past tense consistently. Suggestions: choose present simple for general statements and correct noun phrases and verb duplication.