公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use plural/singular correctly (e.g., "my family").

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, whenever we had a school break my family and I would visit the local park to play games and have picnics, which was a fun way to spend the day.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then explain briefly with specific reasons and linking words. Remove hesitations and finish the sentence. Mention one concrete constraint and one small positive to balance the reply.

範例: Yes, I still like parks, but I rarely go because I am a working student and a mother, so my schedule is very busy. However, when I have free time on weekends I sometimes take my child to a nearby park to relax.

建議: Answer directly and provide specific reasons with clearer linking words. Avoid filler sounds and be concise. Mention concrete benefits (e.g., recreation, public health) to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they offer green space for relaxation and exercise. For example, new parks would reduce stress for residents and provide safe play areas for children.

建議: Be specific and use conditional structure correctly. Start with a clear statement, then give a concrete example of the type of park you would like to visit and why. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., "a famous park" / "I would").

範例: I don't know many famous parks in my country, but if I saw a new or well-known park on social media, I would definitely visit it. For instance, I would like to take my family to a large botanical garden because we enjoy walking and seeing different plants.

× Yes, absolutely. I like to go to the parks when I was a child and when I, when, uh, we don't have school, we uh, go to the parks with my friends and my families.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I liked going to parks when I was a child, and when we didn't have school, we went to parks with my friends and my family.

The speaker mixes present tense 'I like' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. Also use past tense 'didn't have' and 'went' for consistency. 'Parks' can be used without 'the' when speaking generally, and 'family' is usually uncountable here, so 'my family' is correct. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with the time expression and use 'family' as a collective noun.

× Yes, but it depends on my schedule since I am a working student and also I'm and a mom it's hard for me to find or it's hard for me to have time to go to the parks because of.

✓ Yes, but it depends on my schedule. Since I am a working student and a mother, it is hard for me to find time to go to parks.

The sentence incorrectly mixes structures and uses present continuous awkwardly. Use simple present 'it depends' and 'it is hard' to state a general fact. 'I'm and a mom' is ungrammatical; use 'a mother' or 'a mom'. Remove redundant phrases like 'or it's hard for me to have time' and streamline to 'find time'. Use 'parks' without 'the' when speaking generally.

× Yes, as a taxpayer and also, umm, a good citizen, I would like to, uh, see where our taxes go. So I like to have more parks in our city to, uh, get away from stress to so the kids have fun.

✓ Yes, as a taxpayer and a good citizen, I would like to see where our taxes go. So I would like to have more parks in our city to help people get away from stress and so the kids can have fun.

The original has unnecessary commas and repetition. 'I like to have more parks' is acceptable but 'I would like' is more polite and consistent. Add 'help people' to clarify purpose. Use 'so the kids can have fun' to form a clause with correct modal verb 'can' for ability. Remove duplicated words and correct word order for clarity.

× I don't know any parks in our country, but if I saw a famous parks or new parks here on social media, I will definitely want to go there and bring my family and friends so that they can enjoy the the parks.

✓ I don't know any parks in our country, but if I saw a famous park or a new park on social media, I would definitely want to go there and bring my family and friends so they could enjoy the park.

Use singular 'a famous park' or 'a new park' when referring to one park. Also change conditional tense: 'if I saw' should be paired with 'I would' (second conditional) rather than 'I will'. Use 'could' or 'would be able to' for the result clause. Remove duplicate 'the the' and keep 'park' singular to match 'there' referring to that park.