公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons or memories using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense for childhood), avoid hesitation sounds and redundant phrases, and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and made friends there, which helped me feel happy and confident. For example, I used to meet different classmates every weekend and we would play games together.

建議: Answer directly and use the correct present tense form; give a clear reason and, if possible, add a short contrast or frequency detail with linking words. Correct vocabulary and pronunciation (park, not parts) and avoid filler words.

範例: Not really — I rarely go to parks now because I usually feel tired after work and prefer to rest at home. However, I sometimes visit a nearby green space on weekends if the weather is nice.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and correct word forms (jog, jogging; extra parks would help). Make the final point complete and grammatical.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide places for people to relax and exercise. For example, the main park is often crowded when I go jogging, so having additional parks would reduce congestion and make exercise more comfortable.

建議: State the park clearly and use correct future expressions. Provide one or two specific reasons (appearance, activities) and correct sentence structure (subject-verb agreement). Replace repetitions and incomplete fragments with full sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Ecological Park in Davos because it looks beautiful and peaceful. My partner and I enjoy nature walks, so we hope to go there next year with our family to relax and explore the trails.

× Yes I do because I like to play in the parks because they are not activities or umm, how? I have a friends, different friends and I want to enjoy and that.

✓ Yes, I did because I liked playing in parks as a child; there were many activities. I had different friends and I wanted to enjoy time with them.

Problems: incorrect pronouns and possessive forms ('I have a friends' should be 'I had friends'), tense inconsistency (question asks about childhood so past tense is appropriate), awkward phrase 'they are not activities' is unclear and likely meant 'there were many activities'. Suggestions: use past tense for childhood; use 'friends' without 'a' and use 'with them' to refer to friends; replace unclear phrases with clear nouns like 'activities'.

× No, I don't really go to parts anymore because I'm sleepy and tired. I want to to relax maybe tomorrow.

✓ No, I don't really go to parks anymore because I'm often sleepy and tired. I want to relax, maybe tomorrow.

Problems: typo 'parts' should be 'parks' (spelling), awkward repetition 'sleepy and tired' is acceptable but refine to 'often sleepy and tired'; extra 'to' in 'want to to relax'. Suggestions: fix spelling, remove duplicate 'to', and add adverb 'often' if habitual reason is intended. Keep present simple for habitual actions and 'maybe tomorrow' for future intention is acceptable.

× Well I like more parks in my city because it helps other people to relax and jogs.

✓ Well, I would like more parks in my city because they help people relax and jog.

Problems: 'I like more parks' is better as 'I would like more parks' (preference/desire), 'it helps' should agree with plural 'parks' so use 'they help', and 'jogs' is incorrect as a verb form after 'and' where noun 'jog' or verb 'jog' needed; 'jog' as a verb would require 'people to jog' or 'people to go jogging'. Suggestions: match subject and verb number, use 'would like' for desire, and use parallel structure: 'help people relax and jog' or 'help people relax and go jogging'.

× For example, sometimes I go to the main parks to jog and it's very crowded so extra will be.

✓ For example, sometimes I go to the main park to jog, but it's very crowded, so it's not pleasant.

Problems: 'main parks'→context implies a particular main park, choose singular or rephrase; 'extra will be' is ungrammatical and unclear. Suggestions: use conjunction 'but' to contrast, clarify meaning of 'extra will be' (likely 'it's not pleasant' or 'there isn't space'), and maintain clear, complete clauses.

× I would like to visit in ecological Park in Davos because it's look it's look beautiful and peaceful there.

✓ I would like to visit the Ecological Park in Davos because it looks beautiful and peaceful there.

Problems: unnecessary preposition 'visit in' should be 'visit', missing definite article 'the' before a specific park, capitalization of park name as proper noun, and 'it's look it's look' is wrong — use 'it looks'. Suggestions: use 'visit' + object, include 'the' for a specific place, capitalize proper nouns, and use correct verb form 'looks' for present simple description.

× Me and my partner are enjoy.

✓ My partner and I are enjoying it.

Problems: incorrect subject form 'Me and my partner' should be 'My partner and I', incorrect verb form 'are enjoy' should be present continuous 'are enjoying', and missing object 'it' or activity. Suggestions: use correct subject order and pronoun case, use appropriate verb form for continuous action, and include the object or activity being enjoyed.

× I wish to go there in next year with my family.

✓ I wish to go there next year with my family.

Problems: unnecessary preposition 'in' before 'next year' — 'next year' already expresses the time; 'wish to go' is acceptable but 'hope to go' is more natural. Suggestions: remove 'in', consider 'hope to go next year with my family' for natural phrasing.