公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details (who you went with, activities you did) using linking words. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences and avoid hesitations/fillers like “umm.”

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went with my family, and we would have picnics and play games together. Those outings are my fondest childhood memories because they helped me spend quality time outdoors.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then explain briefly with specific reasons and a linking word. Use correct tense and simpler, accurate vocabulary (e.g. “very sunny” or “too hot”). Avoid run-on sentences and maintain coherence.

範例: Not really. Nowadays I avoid parks because it is often too hot and sunny where I live, so I prefer to stay indoors. For example, I usually exercise at home or watch movies to relax instead.

建議: Answer directly and give a brief, clear reason. If you mean there are already enough parks, say so and explain why (e.g. accessibility, size). Use linking words like “because” or “as”. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect grammar.

範例: No, I wouldn't. My city already has several large parks in the center, so I think we have enough green spaces. They are easy to reach and meet most people's needs.

建議: Be concise and specific. If you prefer traveling to other countries instead of visiting local parks, state that clearly and give a reason and one example of a place you'd like to visit. Use linking words and avoid fillers.

範例: Not really — I don't have a particular park in mind. Instead, I prefer to travel abroad to see natural landscapes, for example visiting national parks in New Zealand because I want to experience dramatic scenery and outdoor activities.

× 'Yes I did. Umm, when I have free time I like to go to the park. With my family and. I'll really.'

✓ 'Yes, I did. Umm, when I had free time I liked to go to the park with my family. I really enjoyed it.'

'The student mixes present and past tenses. The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used: have -> had, like -> liked, and the fragment "With my family and. I'll really." is ungrammatical and should be combined into a past-tense complete sentence. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent for past experiences and complete the sentence.'

× 'No, I don't because in this day the sun was so shined and I don't like or the weather in this day because it's really hot, I don't want to go outside. I want to stay at home and do some exercise or watching movie.'

✓ 'No, I don't, because these days the sun is very strong and I don't like the weather as it is really hot. I don't want to go outside. I prefer to stay at home to exercise or watch a movie.'

'The student mixes tenses and uses incorrect expressions. "in this day" should be "these days" for current habitual time; "the sun was so shined" is ungrammatical — use "the sun is very strong"; "I don't like or the weather in this day" is incorrect ordering and words; "do some exercise or watching movie" mixes infinitive and -ing forms — use parallel structure "to exercise or watch a movie". Suggestion: use present simple for habitual current states and maintain parallel verb forms.'

× 'No I wouldn't be curious in my 50 also has some big parks are in the middle of city.'

✓ 'No, I wouldn't. My city also has some big parks in the middle of the city.'

'The sentence has multiple issues but primary ones include singular/plural and sentence structure: "my 50" is unclear and likely incorrect; "also has some big parks are in the middle of city" duplicates verbs and omits articles. Correct form uses "has some big parks in the middle of the city." Suggestion: remove unclear phrase and use proper article "the city." '

× 'In fact, I don't have any parks that I want to go in the future. I want to go, umm, I want to go travel and another country that has, uh, natural.'

✓ 'In fact, I don't have any parks that I want to visit in the future. I want to travel to another country that has natural scenery.'

'The student uses incorrect verb and preposition choices and tense consistency. "want to go in the future" -> better "want to visit in the future"; "want to go travel and another country" should be "want to travel to another country"; "that has, uh, natural" is incomplete — use "natural scenery" or "natural attractions." Suggestion: use correct verb + preposition combinations (visit, travel to) and complete noun phrases.'