公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and limit to 2–3 sentences. For example, correct verb forms (rarely went), avoid repetition, and give a brief specific memory or reason.

範例: Not really. I rarely went to parks as a child because there weren’t any in my province, so I usually stayed at home and played board games and make-believe with my sister.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use present tense for current preferences and improve fluency by combining short sentences. Mention a concrete activity you prefer at the beach to make it vivid.

範例: Not really — I prefer the beach. For example, at Savang Beach I enjoy relaxing on the sand and trying local snacks because the atmosphere is more peaceful and there are better food options than in parks.

建議: Start with a clear affirmative sentence and then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, for example). Avoid repeating phrases like “I think.” Be concise and include one concrete benefit for children and adults.

範例: Yes, definitely — because parks provide green space for relaxation and exercise, and they give children safe places to play. For example, new parks could encourage families to spend time outdoors and improve community health.

建議: Answer directly, use future tense correctly, and finish the thought. Say whether you want to visit parks and mention how you will choose them (e.g., for scenery, facilities). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid trailing off.

範例: Not yet — I don’t know many parks in my country, but I plan to research local parks and visit ones with good scenery and walking trails so I can relax and take photos.

× When I was a child, I rarely go to parks because there weren't any parks available in my province.

✓ When I was a child, I rarely went to parks because there weren't any parks available in my province.

The sentence refers to a past habitual action, so the verb should be in the past tense ('went') rather than present tense ('go'). Use past simple for repeated actions in the past.

× What I used to do when I was a child, I just played with my sister, played with toys.

✓ What I used to do when I was a child was just play with my sister and play with toys.

The original sentence has an awkward structure and missing copula. Use 'What I used to do ... was' and keep verbs in base form after 'was' for past habitual actions; combine parallel actions with 'and'.

× I do not like going to parks.

✓ I do not like going to parks now.

The sentence is grammatical, but adding 'now' clarifies contrast with childhood; main verb 'do not like' is present simple and appropriate. No tense change required.

× We have here in my province Savang Beach where you can just relax, sit down and take a bite on the food that we bought.

✓ Here in my province we have Savang Beach where you can just relax, sit down and take a bite of the food that we bought.

Use natural word order 'Here in my province we have ...'. The correct preposition for eating a small amount is 'take a bite of' not 'take a bite on'. Also 'we have here in my province Savang Beach' word order was awkward.

× Definitely yes, because I think that people should enjoy relaxing in the parks, children should experience having parks where they can play and I think it is a good improvement in my city.

✓ Definitely yes, because I think that people should enjoy relaxing in parks; children should have parks where they can play, and I think it would be a good improvement for my city.

Use 'parks' without the definite article when speaking generally. Replace 'experience having parks' with 'have parks' for natural phrasing. Use 'would be' to indicate hypothetical improvement and 'for my city' as the correct preposition.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

This question is already correct: 'want to go to' expresses future intention and matches the question form. No correction necessary.

× I don't really have any knowledge about parks that are available in my country, but I'll do my research and find spots that I can go to and maybe relaxed a little bit and enjoy the scenery that they have and just.

✓ I don't really have much knowledge about parks available in my country, but I'll do my research and find spots that I can go to, maybe relax a little bit, and enjoy the scenery they have.

Several issues: use 'much' with uncountable 'knowledge' rather than 'any' in this context. 'Relaxed' is past tense; use base form 'relax' after 'maybe'. Remove trailing 'and just' which is incomplete. Also simplify 'parks that are available' to 'parks available'.