公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no + brief reason), avoid filler words and repetitions, and use correct verb forms and pluralization. Add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my parents often took me there. I especially enjoyed the slides and swings, and it was a great place for children to burn off energy.

建議: Use correct tense and phrasing to describe current habits. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add a concise explanation using linking words like 'but' or 'however.' Avoid double negatives and repetition. Provide one specific example of when or why you visit (or do not).

範例: I still like parks, but I rarely visit them because my work schedule is very busy. Occasionally I go for a short walk or a jog on weekends when I have free time.

建議: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'so'). Use correct verb forms and keep sentences concise. Give specific reasons and one clear example of benefits (e.g., exercise, community space).

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for walking and jogging, and they help children play and stay healthy. For example, a new park could include a running track and a playground for families.

建議: Give a clear, structured answer: state which park or type of park you want to visit and why. Use present/future tense correctly and avoid hesitation. Provide a specific detail about when or how often you would go and what you would do there.

範例: In the future I would like to visit a park with a good running track in the mornings because I enjoy running. I plan to go three times a week to build fitness and enjoy the outdoors.

× Absolutely. I love to, uh, visit park when I was child, specially my parents often to, uh, use me to use to visit my going parts and I'm enjoyed with the slides and swings and the park is the place that uh, children's can burn their energy.

✓ Absolutely. I loved visiting parks when I was a child. My parents often took me to the park, and I enjoyed the slides and swings. Parks are places where children can burn off their energy.

Multiple errors: 'love to visit park when I was child' mixes present tense with past time and misses articles and plural; use 'loved visiting parks when I was a child'. 'My parents often to, uh, use me to use to visit' should be 'My parents often took me to the park' (past tense and correct verb). 'I'm enjoyed' is wrong because 'enjoy' does not take passive here; use 'I enjoyed'. 'the park is the place that uh, children's can burn their energy' has incorrect article, plural and possessive/word choice; use 'Parks are places where children can burn off their energy'. Suggestions: match verb tense to time reference, use articles ('a','the') and plural nouns where appropriate, avoid passive or incorrect auxiliary forms, and use 'burn off' for energy.

× Nowadays I was I am too busy with my hectic schedule and my preferred work, so I I couldn't couldn't able to visit park. However, park is normally for jogging and walking. I visited and sometimes.

✓ Nowadays I am too busy with my hectic schedule and work, so I am not able to visit parks. However, parks are normally used for jogging and walking, and I visit them sometimes.

Errors: 'Nowadays I was I am' mixes past and present; keep present 'I am'. 'my preferred work' is awkward; use 'work'. 'I couldn't couldn't able' is redundant and uses past modal incorrectly; use 'I am not able' for current inability. 'visit park' needs article/plural: 'visit parks'. 'park is normally for jogging and walking' should be passive/causative: 'parks are normally used for jogging and walking'. 'I visited and sometimes' is fragment; make 'I visit them sometimes'. Suggestions: maintain consistent tense, avoid double negatives/redundant modals, use correct noun forms/articles, and complete sentence structure.

× Oh, definitely that I would like to see many parks in my city because of the people are very tend to use the park when they want to walking and then want to jogging and sometimes they are running in park and specially for children who are born there who burn their energy there and it's a kind of well-being and very sports activity will happen there.

✓ Oh, definitely. I would like to see more parks in my city because people tend to use parks when they want to walk, jog, or run. Parks are especially good for children to burn off energy, and they promote well-being and sports activity.

Problems: 'because of the people are very tend' mixes 'because of' with clause and incorrect verb; use 'because people tend'. 'use the park when they want to walking and then want to jogging' wrong verb forms; use 'walk, jog, or run'. 'they are running in park' needs article/plural: 'in parks'. 'children who are born there' is irrelevant/wrong; use 'children' or 'children who use them'. 'who burn their energy there' awkward: 'to burn off energy'. Sentence was run-on and disorganized. Suggestions: use correct verb forms after 'tend to' (base form), use articles/plurals, simplify clauses, and break long sentences into clearer shorter ones.

× Uh, in, in the future, I definitely visit to, uh, when running park where the, I, I visited in morning, specially I'm, I'm running enthusiastic. So I would like to run a lot. And uh, uh, it's one kind of activity if my daily routine and it's, uh, give me a very small glimpse of the sports enthusiastics.

✓ In the future, I will definitely visit parks where I can run in the mornings because I enjoy running. I would like to run a lot. It could become part of my daily routine and would give me a sense of being a sports enthusiast.

Errors: 'I definitely visit to' is incorrect future expression and wrong preposition; use 'I will definitely visit'. 'when running park where the, I, I visited in morning' is unclear; clarify 'parks where I can run in the mornings'. 'specially I'm, I'm running enthusiastic' incorrect adjective use and tense; use 'because I enjoy running' or 'I am enthusiastic about running'. 'it's one kind of activity if my daily routine' should be 'It could become part of my daily routine'. 'give me a very small glimpse of the sports enthusiastics' wrong noun/adjective forms; use 'give me a sense of being a sports enthusiast'. Suggestions: use appropriate future tense forms ('will' or 'going to'), correct prepositions ('visit parks' not 'visit to'), use nouns/adjectives correctly, and simplify to clear ideas.