公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Порада: Уточніть час і дайте коротке, зв’язне речення на початку, потім додайте 1–2 підтримуючі деталі. Уникайте граматичних помилок у виразах про дитинство (наприклад, «in my child» → «as a child») і використовуйте зв’язки (наприклад, «and», «because», «so»).

範例: As a child, I enjoyed going to parks with my family. We often rode bikes and took walks together, which made those outings fun and memorable.

建議: Порада: Почніть з прямої відповіді на питання, потім розкрийте причини коротко і логічно, використовуючи зв’язки (наприклад, «because», «so», «therefore»). Уникайте зайвих або зайвий довгих списків — залиште 2–3 специфічні причини. Перевірте часові форми (наприклад, «it helps me relax» замість «it's helped me relax» якщо про звичку).

範例: I don't often go to parks now; I prefer staying at home because it helps me relax. For example, I usually play computer games or read books in my free time, which is more convenient for me.

建議: Порада: Дайте чітку відповідь на запитання (так/ні/частково), потім перераховуйте пріоритети впорядковано й коротко. Використовуйте узгоджені форми множественних іменників і артиклі (наприклад, «well-developed infrastructure, parks, coffee shops, sports grounds»).

範例: Yes, I would. I think my city needs well-developed infrastructure and more parks. In addition, more coffee shops, sports grounds and cultural sites would make the area more attractive.

建議: Порада: Відповідайте конкретно — назвіть тип парку або його характеристики. Використовуйте ясні описові фрази і зв’язки («where», «for», «that have») і уникайте незрозумілих слів («falsifies») та повторів. Поясніть, чому саме такий парк вам підходить.

範例: In the future I would like to visit parks that are family-friendly and accessible for all ages. For instance, a park with safe playgrounds, walking paths and facilities for people with different abilities would be ideal.

× I liked going to the parks in my child with my family, my parents, my grandparents ride the bike walks to the park.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child with my family; my parents and grandparents used to ride bicycles and walk to the park.

The original sentence has multiple tense and word choice errors. 'in my child' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child' for past time reference. 'the parks' is unnecessary; 'parks' is fine. 'ride the bike walks to the park' mixes verbs and nouns incorrectly. Use 'used to ride bicycles and walk to the park' to describe habitual past actions. Also add punctuation to separate ideas.

× I prefer to stay at home. I enjoy playing computer games, reading books, drawing, and listening to music or horror stories because it's helped me relax and I have more free time to do the things I like.

✓ I prefer to stay at home. I enjoy playing computer games, reading books, drawing, and listening to music or horror stories because they help me relax and I have more free time to do the things I like.

The clause uses present habits, so use present simple 'help' instead of 'it's helped' (present perfect incorrect here). Also 'it' is unclear for plural activities, so use 'they' to refer to the listed activities. Maintain consistent present tense for habitual actions.

× I'd more like well developed civil infrastructure, park, coffee shops, sport ground, playground, historical and cultural places.

✓ I would prefer better-developed civil infrastructure, parks, coffee shops, sports grounds, playgrounds, and historical and cultural sites.

The original sentence has awkward word order and missing plural forms. 'I'd more like' is unidiomatic; use 'I would prefer'. 'well developed' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun: 'better-developed'. List items should be plural where appropriate: 'parks', 'coffee shops', 'sports grounds', 'playgrounds'. 'historical and cultural places' is better as 'historical and cultural sites'.

× I would like to go parks, uh where everything with people, with people falsifies for all ages people and all healthy category.

✓ I would like to go to parks where there are facilities for people of all ages and for different health categories.

The original sentence has several structural and word choice errors. 'go parks' needs the infinitive with preposition: 'go to parks'. 'where everything with people' is unclear; use 'where there are facilities'. 'falsifies' is incorrect; likely intended 'facilities'. 'for all ages people' should be 'for people of all ages'. 'all healthy category' should be 'different health categories' or 'various health needs'. Use clear noun phrases and correct word order.