公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'liked', 'used to') and connect ideas with a simple linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I used to play there with my friends. For example, we would build games and explore nature together, which helped me become more imaginative and cooperative.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and phrasing. If you mean you don't go often, say so. Give a concise reason and one specific example of when you do visit. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (e.g., 'personal tax').

範例: I don't go to parks very often now because I am busy with work. However, I sometimes visit a nearby park with friends at the weekend to relax and chat.

建議: Make the point clearer and use precise vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then explain one clear benefit with a concrete example. Replace vague contrasts like 'rather than education' with a clearer phrase such as 'outside of school'.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they give children safe places to play and learn about nature. For example, parks let kids observe plants and insects, which complements what they learn at school.

建議: Be specific and complete your sentence. Use accurate tense and avoid filler words like 'etcetera'. Name the features that interest you and explain why they appeal to you. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Kesar Park because I heard it has many insect and animal exhibits and a small library. I am interested in seeing the specimens and borrowing nature books to learn more about local wildlife.

× Yes, I like to going park as a child because in my childhood I always used to play in parks with my friends which helps me to develop a different perspective, ideas and positive thoughts between each other.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because in my childhood I always used to play in parks with my friends, which helped me to develop different perspectives, ideas, and positive thoughts with each other.

Multiple issues: 'like to going' mixes infinitive and gerund; choose 'liked going' to match past habitual action. 'park' needs plural 'parks' or article; use 'parks'. 'which helps' should be past 'which helped' to match past timeframe. 'a different perspective' -> plural 'different perspectives' for variety. 'between each other' is unnatural; use 'with each other'. Punctuation: add comma before 'which'. Suggestion: use consistent tense for past habits (liked/used to + verb), use gerund after like when referring to activity (liked going), pluralize countable nouns when appropriate, and use 'with each other' for mutual actions.

× No, I didn't went to parks now because of my busy schedule, for example jobs and my own personal tax.

✓ No, I don't go to parks now because of my busy schedule, for example work and personal taxes.

'didn't went' is incorrect past negative form; use 'didn't go' for past, but speaker means present habit 'now', so use present simple 'don't go'. 'parks' could be fine plural. 'jobs' is unnatural; use 'work'. 'my own personal tax' is unidiomatic; 'personal taxes' or 'tax matters' is better. Suggestion: choose tense that matches time adverb (now -> present simple), use correct auxiliary for negation, and use natural nouns for reasons.

× But sometimes I visit parks with my friends for relaxation.

✓ But sometimes I visit parks with my friends for relaxation.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present simple to describe a habitual action ('sometimes I visit'), which matches 'now'. No change needed.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because children used to play in parks with their friends.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because children play in parks with their friends.

'used to play' implies a past habit; here the reason for wanting more parks is a general or current observation, so present simple 'play' is appropriate. 'Would like' is correct for polite desire. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths or current habits.

× That helps to gain knowledge about the outside environment rather than education.

✓ This helps them learn about the environment outside school, not just formal education.

Awkward structure: 'That helps to gain knowledge about the outside environment rather than education' is unclear. 'Helps them learn' is more natural than 'helps to gain knowledge'. 'Outside environment' is better as 'environment outside school' or 'the outdoors'. 'Rather than education' is vague; clarify 'not just formal education'. Suggestion: make subject clear ('this'/'it'/'this experience helps them') and contrast with 'not just' for clarity.

× Yes, I would like to go Kesar Park in the future because in Kesar Park I heard that there was a lot of specimens like insects, domestic animals, etcetera, etcetera.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Kesar Park in the future because I have heard that there are many specimens there, such as insects and domestic animals.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' -> 'go to Kesar Park' (preposition error). 'I heard that there was' mixes past reporting with present existence; use 'I have heard that there are' to report information relevant now. 'a lot of specimens' -> 'many specimens' is more natural. 'etcetera, etcetera' is redundant; give examples or say 'and so on'. Suggestion: include 'to' with 'go', use present perfect for reported information affecting present, and use clearer quantifiers.

× And also there was a library which.

✓ There is also a library there.

Fragment: 'which.' leaves sentence incomplete. 'There was a library which' suggests a relative clause but doesn't finish it. Use complete sentence 'There is also a library there' to state existence, or complete the relative clause: 'which has many books'. Also use present tense 'is' if library still exists. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and ensure relative clauses are completed.