公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and directly responsive. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses (past for childhood), avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like 'however' to show contrast.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. However, there wasn’t a park near my house, so I usually played in a small park at my school. It was a pleasant place with a few swings where my friends and I spent our recess.

建議: Use correct present tense and smoother phrasing. Give one clear reason with a brief example and connect ideas with 'because' or 'so'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, and I actually go more often now than when I was a child because they help me relax. For example, when I feel stressed I sit on a bench under a tree and read for 20–30 minutes to clear my mind.

建議: Answer directly and fix grammar and word choice. State your opinion clearly, give a specific reason and one concrete suggestion or example. Avoid unfinished phrases and vague words.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my village because there are currently none nearby. More parks would give children safe places to play and families somewhere pleasant to spend weekends, for instance a small playground with benches and trees.

建議: Be specific and confident. Remove fillers (uh, umm), correct facts (Disneyland locations), and use clear time expressions. Give a concise reason why and one detail about what you want to do there.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit Disneyland in Europe or the one in California someday because I grew up watching shows about it. I especially want to go on the themed rides and see the parades that I have only seen on TV.

× Yes I do, I usually like to going go park when I am a child but due to lack of space and availability there is no park nearby in our house.

✓ Yes, I did. I usually liked going to parks when I was a child, but due to a lack of space and availability there were no parks near our house.

The student mixes present and past tenses. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense verbs: 'do' -> 'did', 'am' -> 'was', 'like' -> 'liked'. Also correct verb form 'going' (use 'liked going') and count nouns: 'park' -> 'parks', and add articles: 'a lack of space' and 'near our house'. Use plural 'parks' and past 'were' for existence.

× But in our school there is a small park which we have to play during.

✓ But at our school there was a small park where we used to play.

Use the correct preposition 'at our school' and past tense 'was' for childhood. The clause 'which we have to play during' is ungrammatical; use 'where we used to play' to indicate habitual past action. 'Have to' is incorrect here.

× Yes, I like to going. I like to go parks now more than my childhood because when I feel stressed and unhappy, I usually prefer going to there and sit for a while to get some peaceful atmosphere and weather.

✓ Yes, I like going. I go to parks now more than in my childhood because when I feel stressed or unhappy, I usually prefer going there and sitting for a while to enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and pleasant weather.

Correct verb forms and prepositions: 'like to going' -> 'like going'; 'like to go parks' -> 'go to parks'; compare periods using 'more than in my childhood'. 'Going to there' should be 'going there'. After 'prefer' use the -ing form 'sitting'. 'Get some peaceful atmosphere and weather' is awkward; use 'enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and pleasant weather'.

× Basically I'm living in a village so there is no more parks in our village, but I usually prefer to have some beautiful park so that every child in our society can spend their quality time there with the.

✓ Basically I live in a village, so there are no parks in our village, but I would like to have some beautiful parks so that every child in our community can spend quality time there.

Use simple present 'I live' for general fact. 'There is no more parks' is wrong: use 'there are no parks' (agreement and 'no' with plural). 'Prefer to have' -> 'would like to have' is more natural for desire. 'Society' should be 'community'. Remove trailing 'with the'.

× As I usually want to go to Disneyland, which was uh, placed in Europe, uh, because from my childhood onwards, by watching TV programs and cartoons, I usually like to, umm, visit at least one time in my life, umm.

✓ I have always wanted to go to Disneyland, which is located in Europe, because since my childhood, from watching TV programs and cartoons, I have wanted to visit it at least once in my life.

Use present perfect 'have always wanted' to express a continued desire from the past to present. 'Was placed' is incorrect for location; use 'is located'. 'From my childhood onwards' -> 'since my childhood'. 'Visit at least one time' -> 'visit it at least once'. Maintain consistent tense and remove filler words.