公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and pronoun use, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Also keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences).

範例: Not really. I preferred staying at home because I felt more comfortable there, where I could read and play quietly. For example, I often spent afternoons reading books instead of going to the nearby park.

建議: Correct factual/wording errors (Paris vs parks) and make the response natural: start with a clear statement, then give concise reasons with linking words. Avoid long, vague phrases and keep tense consistent.

範例: No, I still rarely go to parks. I prefer staying at home because I enjoy reading and watching TV, so I often relax indoors. As a result, I consider myself more introverted than outgoing.

建議: Be concise and fix grammar/word choice (part→park; avoid fillers). Provide a specific reason and an example of activities, using linking words to connect ideas. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would. There is only one small park in my town, so more parks would offer more options. For instance, new parks could include jogging paths and sports fields where I could exercise and meet others.

建議: Good specific example. Improve grammar (article use, singular/plural) and add a linking word to show reason. Keep it to two or three clear sentences and add one brief detail about an activity you'd do there.

範例: Yes, I'd like to visit Central Park in New York City because it has huge green spaces and many trees where I can enjoy fresh air. For example, I would spend time reading on a bench and playing chess in one of the park's plazas.

× Not really, because I'm the type of child who prefers to stay at home and tends to his comfortability rather than going outside and trying new things.

✓ Not really, because I'm the type of child who preferred to stay at home and tended to his comfort rather than going outside and trying new things.

The original sentence mixes present and past tense; the question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used (preferred, tended). 'Comfortability' is not a natural noun here; use 'comfort'. Also pronoun 'his' is inconsistent with 'I'm' (first person); however this correction follows the tense requirement. Suggestion: change pronoun to 'my' if keeping first person: '...who preferred to stay at home and tended to my comfort.' Maintain consistent tense and natural nouns.

× Well, I still never go to Paris until now because I believe I'm still the same child back then.

✓ Well, I have never been to Paris until now because I believe I'm still the same child I was back then.

The sentence incorrectly uses simple present 'never go' for a past experience continuing to present; use present perfect 'have never been' to express never having visited up to now. 'Paris' likely meant 'parks' in context; if 'Paris' is correct, keep it. 'Back then' requires a reference 'I was back then' for clarity. Use consistent time reference.

× I still prefer to spend my time at home reading or watching shows on television.

✓ I still prefer to spend my time at home reading or watching shows on television.

This sentence is grammatical but ensure tense matches context. 'Still prefer' is present and appropriate if speaking about current habits. No correction needed.

× So as a result, I grew up being introverted and finding comfort in solace.

✓ As a result, I grew up introverted and found comfort in solitude.

Use concise past forms 'grew up' with past 'found' for parallel structure. 'Introverted' as adjective is fine; 'finding comfort in solace' is awkward and repetitive; use 'found comfort in solitude'. Keep past tense consistency.

× Definitely I would like to see more parks in my city because in my current town down there is only one part and I think there's nothing much to do in there.

✓ Definitely, I would like to see more parks in my city because in my current town there is only one park and I think there is not much to do there.

Replace 'part' with correct noun 'park'. Remove unnecessary 'down' and correct article usage: 'only one park'. 'There's nothing much to do in there' is awkward; use 'there is not much to do there'. Also add a comma after 'Definitely' for natural speech.

× So it would be better to have many options so I can engage also in specific physical activities that would help me become physically active.

✓ It would be better to have many options so I can engage in specific physical activities that would help me become more physically active.

Avoid repeating 'so' twice; begin with 'It would be better' and keep one 'so'. Place 'also' appropriately or remove it; here it's unnecessary. Use 'more physically active' for natural comparative expression.

× Definitely I would like to visit Central Park that is located at New York City.

✓ I would definitely like to visit Central Park, which is located in New York City.

Use 'in New York City' not 'at New York City'. Use 'which' to add a non-restrictive clause and add commas. Place 'definitely' in a natural position before 'like'.

× There is a huge green spaces there that are full of trees so I can breathe fresh air and there are also a lot of things to do there such as reading, playing chess.

✓ There are huge green spaces there that are full of trees, so I can breathe fresh air, and there are also a lot of things to do there, such as reading and playing chess.

'A huge green spaces' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'huge green spaces' with plural verb 'are'. Add commas for clarity and use 'such as reading and playing chess' rather than a comma before the final item. Ensure subject-verb agreement.