公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, use correct tense and natural phrasing, and avoid redundant or confusing phrases. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, follow with 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words, and correct grammar errors (e.g. "I liked" not "I like," "for hours," remove "in as of now").

範例: I liked going to parks as a child. For example, I used to spend hours on the swings and slides with my brother and sister, and we often had picnics under the trees.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant but has minor repetition and a small typo. Keep it concise, avoid repeating phrases already said, and include one specific detail to enrich the response (e.g. what activities your children do).

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. As a mother of two, I take my children there most weekends because it’s a safe place where they can run around and play on the swings and jungle gym.

建議: Improve grammar and naturalness: use a clear structure with a topic sentence and a brief reason or example. Remove repeated words and use linking words to give a specific reason why more parks would be good.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for families and improve air quality; for instance, additional neighborhood parks would give children safe places to play close to home.

建議: Make the answer more precise and fix repetition and article errors. Give one or two specific destinations and a brief reason for each. Use correct place names and structure (e.g. "Kew Gardens in London").

範例: Yes, I’d like to visit several parks in Europe in the future, especially Kew Gardens in London because of its famous glasshouses, and France’s Versailles gardens to see the formal landscaping.

× Yes, as a child I like going to parks.

✓ Yes, as a child I liked going to parks.

The response refers to a past habitual action (when the speaker was a child). Use past tense 'liked' for past habits. Suggestion: use 'used to' or the simple past for past routines (e.g., 'I used to like going to parks').

× I used to play hours on the swings and slides together with my brother and sister in as of now.

✓ I used to play for hours on the swings and slides with my brother and sister.

Several issues: 'play hours' needs a preposition 'for' to indicate duration; 'in as of now' is inappropriate and unnecessary; 'together with' is wordy—'with' is natural. Keep past habitual 'used to'.

× Now that I'm a mother of two, I still enjoy going visiting different parks in our places.

✓ Now that I'm a mother of two, I still enjoy visiting different parks in our area.

Mixing 'going visiting' duplicates actions; choose 'visiting'. 'Places' is vague; 'area' or 'city' is appropriate. Maintain present simple 'enjoy visiting' for current habits.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks.

Redundant adverb 'now' after 'still' is unnecessary. Use 'still' alone to indicate continuation of liking in the present.

× As I mentioned earlier, now that I'm a mother of two, I always take my children to the parks on the weekends because I know it's a safe place for them to to play.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, now that I'm a mother of two, I always take my children to the park on weekends because I know it's a safe place for them to play.

Use 'the park' or just 'park' rather than 'the parks' when speaking generally about visiting parks for play; 'on the weekends' is more natural as 'on weekends' in general statements. Also remove duplicate 'to'.

× Yes, I definitely love to see more parks in our city in in the near future.

✓ Yes, I would definitely love to see more parks in our city in the near future.

'Love to see' is acceptable but for a future desire 'would love' is more natural. Also remove duplicate 'in'. Maintain future orientation with 'in the near future.'

× Yes, there are still some parks that I would like to visit in the future, somewhere like like somewhere in Europe and I want to visit also the their Botanical Garden in Key, London.

✓ Yes, there are still some parks that I would like to visit in the future, somewhere in Europe, and I also want to visit the Kew Botanical Garden in London.

Remove duplicate words 'like like somewhere'. 'Visit also the their' has extra words; use 'also' before the verb and correct article use: 'the Kew Botanical Garden'. 'Key' is incorrect name; correct is 'Kew'. Ensure parallel structure: 'I would like to visit... and I also want to visit...'. 'Kew Botanical Garden in London' is the proper noun.