公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, use correct tense and more precise details. Limit to 2–4 sentences and connect ideas with a linking word. For example, start: “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.” Then add a specific supporting detail: who you went with, what you did, and a brief reason why it was enjoyable.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my family for picnics and we would play games on the grass, which made those days really fun and memorable.

建議: Respond directly and politely; avoid long hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use correct grammar (present perfect/simple) and give one or two specific reasons connected by linking words (for example, “because” and “however”). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Not really, because I have become very busy with work and rarely find time for visits. Also, some parks near me are often crowded, which makes them less relaxing.

建議: Give a direct opinion, then support it with specific benefits and use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid repetition and finish the sentence with a clear point. Keep answers concise (2–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they improve air quality and provide green spaces for exercise. For example, additional parks would give residents places to relax and children places to play.

建議: Answer directly, then give a brief, specific reason and a contrasting sentence if relevant. Use correct verbs and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “boring” and “crowded”). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: Not really, because I often find parks boring and crowded, so I prefer indoor activities. However, I might visit a park if there was a special event or a friend invited me.

× Yes, definitely. I like uh, because when I was a child, I often go to the park with my family, umm, I and we often go for picnic in there and there is there have flash.

✓ Yes, definitely. I liked it because when I was a child, I often went to the park with my family. We often had picnics there and there were fountains.

Present tense used incorrectly with past time reference. Use past tense verbs (liked, went, had) to match 'when I was a child'. Also incorrect phrasing 'I and we' and 'go for picnic in there' corrected to natural forms; 'there have flash' likely intended 'there were fountains' which uses plural agreement and past tense. Suggestions: Use past tense for past events; simplify subject phrases (We often had picnics there).

× Absolutely no, because when I grew up I become very busy and I have no time to go to the park and also umm, you know, there are too many inside on there umm, it makes me annoying and also I think the part is very.

✓ Absolutely not. When I grew up I became very busy and I had no time to go to the park. Also, there were too many people inside and it made me annoyed. I also think the park is very small/boring.

Mixed and incorrect tense forms: 'become' should be past 'became' to match 'when I grew up'; 'have' should be past 'had'. Use past tense consistently. Also 'it makes me annoying' is incorrect: use 'it made me annoyed' (adjective) or 'it annoyed me' (verb). 'the part is very' incomplete; provide likely adjective. Suggestions: Maintain consistent past tense when describing past changes; use correct adjective forms (annoyed) or verbs (annoyed me).

× Umm, actually yes umm, you know there are many parks can make our city become more fresher and airy. Umm you know there's too many tree and plants in the parks so.

✓ Umm, actually yes. There are many parks that can make our city fresher and airier. There are many trees and plants in the parks.

Incorrect or missing relative structure and comparative forms: 'can make our city become more fresher' is ungrammatical; use 'fresher' without 'more' (double comparative) and 'airier' for comparative of airy. Also 'there's too many tree and plants' mixes singular contraction with plural nouns and missing plural forms; use 'there are many trees and plants'. Suggestions: Use correct comparative forms (fresher, airier), avoid double comparatives, and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns ('there are').

× No, umm, actually I am not really into go to the park umm because I think there's very boring and also having too many insights on there and I have nothing to do in there.

✓ No, actually I'm not really into going to the park because I think it's very boring and there are too many insects there, and I have nothing to do there.

Incorrect verb form after 'into': use gerund 'going' not infinitive 'go'. 'there's very boring' should be 'it's very boring' using contraction for it is and adjective 'boring'. 'having too many insights on there' is incorrect word choice; likely 'insects' and use 'there are too many insects there' with correct plural and 'there' placement. Also 'in there' redundant; use 'there'. Suggestions: After 'into' use gerund; use 'there are' with plural nouns; choose correct vocabulary (insects) and keep 'there' placement consistent.