公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but has fluency and coherence issues (hesitations, repetitions, incomplete ending) and some grammar errors. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence. 2) Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, “because” or “and”), avoiding filler words (uh, um). 3) Finish your sentence fully and check verb forms (e.g., “I don't often go to parks”). 4) Keep within 2–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., ‘excited’, ‘enjoyed’, ‘family outings’).

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were exciting and a place for family outings. For example, I often played on the swings and had picnics with my parents and friends, which made those days very memorable.

建議: Answer addresses the question but is disfluent and grammatically weak. To improve: 1) Give a direct topic sentence (Yes/No) then explain concisely. 2) Remove fillers and use linking words like “because” or “nowadays”. 3) Use plural/singular correctly (‘habits’ → ‘a new hobby’). 4) Support with a brief reason or example. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really — nowadays I prefer indoor hobbies because I enjoy playing table tennis and chess. These activities are convenient and challenge me mentally, so I rarely go to parks anymore.

建議: This answer is clear in meaning but has repetition and grammatical mistakes. To improve: 1) Start with a direct answer and use clearer linking words (“because”, “so”). 2) Avoid repeating phrases; be specific about benefits (exercise, family time, cycling). 3) Use correct word order (e.g., “we don't have many large parks”) and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would — we need more parks in my city because there are few large green spaces for walking and cycling. More parks would give families places to exercise and relax, improving public health and community life.

建議: Your enthusiasm shows, but the answer is vague and contains grammar errors and repetition. To improve: 1) Be specific about which parks or types of parks you mean (e.g., national parks, theme parks). 2) Use correct grammar (e.g., “American parks which have” and avoid repeated words). 3) Give one concrete reason or example of an attraction you want to try. Keep answer to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit national parks in the United States, such as Yellowstone, because they offer spectacular scenery and outdoor activities. For instance, I want to try hiking and wildlife watching to recharge and experience nature up close.

× Yes, of course, like other children, I used to like going to parks as, uh, it used to give me lots of excitement and enjoyment, especially if I was, uh, with my family members and my friends in my childhood.

✓ Yes, of course. Like other children, I used to like going to parks because they used to give me a lot of excitement and enjoyment, especially when I was with my family and friends during my childhood.

The sentence misuses 'it used to give' to refer to parks (plural), so the plural subject requires 'they used to give' (subject-pronoun agreement). Also 'a lot' is the correct quantifier and 'during my childhood' is more natural. Break the long run-on sentence into clearer clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× But nowadays, uh, I don't often go parks and I don't like because I'm busy with my.

✓ But nowadays I don't often go to parks and I don't like going because I'm busy with my work.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating movement toward a place: 'go to parks'. Also 'busy with my' is incomplete; add a noun such as 'work' or 'job'. Use 'going' to explain what the speaker does not like. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Uh, to be honest, not because uh, as I, uh, as I'm growing, uh, I have another habits that I'm doing nowadays, especially uh, playing ping pong and playing chess, which are my, umm. Favorite ones?

✓ To be honest, no, because as I am growing I have other habits nowadays, especially playing ping pong and chess, which are my favorite activities.

Use 'no' rather than 'not' to answer the question. 'I have another habits' is incorrect: use 'other habits' (plural) and remove redundant 'that I'm doing'. 'Playing ping pong and chess' is sufficient; 'favorite ones' is vague—use 'favorite activities'. Ensure present continuous 'I am growing' is correct but avoid unnecessary fillers. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Of course, yes, because in my country more people want to walk around the parks as we don't have big and more parks in my country, we don't have opportunity to cycle or to walk with our family members.

✓ Of course. In my country many people want to walk in parks, but we don't have many large parks, so we don't have the opportunity to cycle or walk with our family members.

Use 'many' instead of 'more' when referring to countable nouns without a comparison. 'Big and more parks' is ungrammatical; 'many large parks' is correct. Include 'the' before 'opportunity' when referring to a specific possibility. Use parallel infinitives 'to cycle or walk'. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× So it will be very great.

✓ So that would be wonderful.

The original phrase 'very great' is awkward in English; use 'wonderful' or 'very good.' Also 'would be' is a more natural modal choice when expressing a hypothetical benefit. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Definitely, yes. In the future I will go to American parks which has lots of opportunities to try and and there are different kinds of attractions that every kind of people can try and can get energy and recharge their battery.

✓ Definitely. In the future I will visit American parks, which have many opportunities to try different activities, and there are different kinds of attractions that people of all ages can try to get energy and recharge their batteries.

Use 'visit' instead of 'go to' for places in this context. The relative clause needs plural agreement: 'parks which have' not 'has'. Use 'many' instead of 'lots of' for formality and 'different activities' is clearer than 'try and and'. 'Every kind of people' is incorrect; use 'people of all ages' or 'people of all kinds'. 'Recharge their battery' should be pluralized to 'recharge their batteries' or rephrased as 'recharge their energy'. Remove duplicate 'and'. Grammar problem type ID: 27