公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi, hoạt động, tần suất). Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi trật tự từ (word order).

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends and we usually had picnics near the lake on weekends.

建議: Câu trả lời hiện không rõ nghĩa và có lỗi nghiêm trọng về từ vựng và cấu trúc. Cần trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích lý do rõ ràng và dùng liên từ (because, so) để nối ý. Tránh từ hoặc cụm từ không phù hợp.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and help me relax after studying. I often go for a walk or read a book on a bench.

建議: Câu trả lời mâu thuẫn và có lỗi từ vựng ("sparks" thay vì "parks" or "crowded"). Cần trả lời rõ ràng (yes/no/both), giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ không gian, nhu cầu trường học) và dùng cấu trúc hợp lý. Hạn chế lặp từ và sửa lỗi cú pháp.

範例: I'm not sure. My city already has many parks, so I would prefer the local government to build more schools instead of additional parks, because we need better education facilities.

建議: Câu trả lời mơ hồ và có lỗi số nhiều/đếm được (too much/too many) và thì số (futures). Nên trả lời rõ ràng nêu vài tên hoặc loại công viên bạn muốn thăm, cùng lý do ngắn gọn. Giữ độ dài 1–3 câu, dùng linking word nếu cần.

範例: Yes, there are several parks I'd like to visit in the future, especially the national botanical garden and a seaside park near my hometown because they have beautiful landscapes and walking trails.

× Yes I did. I often hang out with my friend.

✓ Yes, I did. I often hung out with my friends.

Error type: subject-verb agreement and plural noun. The student used simple present 'hang' though context is past ('did') so verb tense should be past 'hung'. Also 'my friend' implies one friend but typical collocation with 'often' implies multiple outings with 'friends' or use 'my friend' with singular when specific. Suggest using 'friends' for repeated activities. Suggestions: match past tense with 'hung' and use plural 'friends' if speaking about multiple occasions.

× I usually with my friend have a picnic.

✓ I usually had a picnic with my friends.

Word order and tense error. The original order 'with my friend have a picnic' is incorrect; English requires subject-verb-object order. Also context is past, so use past 'had'. Use plural 'friends' if referring to repeated past events. Suggest structure: subject + adverb + verb + object + adverbial phrase: 'I usually had picnics with my friends.'

× Yes I do, maybe because now my friend and I very quite ***** purses to learning.

✓ Yes, I do. Maybe because now my friend and I are very focused on studying.

Multiple errors: incorrect word order, wrong word choice, missing auxiliary 'are' for present continuous/state, and unclear word 'purses' likely intended 'dedicated' or 'focused'. Use adjective 'focused' and 'on studying' to express attention to learning. Suggest: include 'are' before adjective and use correct verb/noun collocation: 'focused on studying.'

× I think I don't like to see more parks in the in my city because my city is too many sparks.

✓ I don't think I want to see more parks in my city because there are already too many parks.

Problems: incorrect negation placement and sentence order ('I think I don't like' is awkward), 'to see more parks' unnatural, 'in the in my city' duplicated, and 'sparks' is wrong word for 'parks'. Use 'I don't think I want' or 'I don't think we need' and 'there are' to state existence. Also use plural 'parks.' Suggest: 'I don't think I want to see more parks in my city because there are already too many parks.'

× I would like to see more school. Yes, maybe.

✓ I would like to see more schools.

Quantifier and count noun error. 'School' is a countable noun; when talking about more than one, use plural 'schools'. Also 'more school' is ungrammatical. Suggest: pluralize to 'schools' or use 'more school facilities' if meaning facilities.

× Oh of course I have too much too many park I want to go to in the futures.

✓ Oh of course I have too many parks I want to go to in the future.

Errors: 'too much' vs 'too many'—use 'too many' for countable nouns like 'parks'. Remove duplicated words. 'Futures' is incorrect plural; use singular 'future'. Also add punctuation or conjunction. Suggest: 'I have too many parks I want to go to in the future.'