公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and grammar mistakes, and add one specific supporting detail. Use concise sentences (max 5) and a linking word if needed. Focus on correct tense and singular/plural forms (e.g., 'the park', 'my friends').

範例: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child. I often went there with my friends to play games and we spent hours on the swings. Because the park was near my home, it was our favourite place to meet after school.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you still go. Reduce hesitations and correct word choice (e.g., 'on weekends', 'because of my academic work'). Add one specific detail about frequency or what you do there, linked with a reason. Keep it short and fluent.

範例: Yes, I still visit parks on weekends, although not as often as before. Because I am busy with my academic work, I usually spend an hour there walking or reading to relax.

建議: Answer directly then give a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid repetitions and unclear phrases ('my pocket'). Use correct grammar ('a new park opened', 'far from my home'). Use a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve residents' quality of life. For example, a new park opened recently, but it is far from my home, so more local parks would make it easier for me to visit regularly.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence about future plans, avoid repetition and grammar errors, and include one specific plan or example (which parks or activities). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make reasons coherent.

範例: Yes, I have several parks on my bucket list that I want to visit in the future because they help me relax. For example, I would like to visit the botanical garden to walk among the plants and the riverside park to meet friends and have picnics.

× Yeah, I like to go park, uh, uh, since when I was a child, uh, I like to go parks and, uh, I love to spend their times with my friends and I also enjoy the swing in the.

✓ Yeah, I liked going to parks when I was a child. I liked going to parks, and I loved spending time with my friends, and I also enjoyed the swings.

Multiple errors: singular/plural and article use (ID 1 and 22) — 'go park' is incorrect; use 'go to the park' or plural 'go to parks'. Also 'go parks' needs 'go to parks' or better 'going to parks'. Past tense needed (ID 5) because the question asks about childhood; change 'like' to 'liked', 'love' to 'loved', 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed'. Pronoun and possessive errors: 'their times' is incorrect (ID 12); use 'spending time' without 'their'. 'the swing in the.' is incomplete and wrong article/phrasing (ID 17); use 'the swings' or 'swings'. Suggestion: simplify into clear past-tense sentences, use 'going to parks' and 'spending time' and plural 'swings'.

× Uh, yeah, I still go to parks, uh, in the weekend as a, a student and, uh, I, I don't have so much time to, uh, spend my time, uh, in your path because of my academics work. So, but.

✓ Uh, yeah, I still go to parks on the weekends as a student, but I don't have much time to spend there because of my academic work.

Tense/word choice and preposition errors: use 'on the weekends' or 'at the weekend' (ID 6 and 11) rather than 'in the weekend'. Article and noun form errors (ID 22): 'my academics work' is incorrect; correct to 'my academic work'. Pronoun/preposition 'in your path' is incorrect (ID 11 and 12); likely meant 'there'. Also use 'much' instead of 'so much' for uncountable 'time'. Suggestion: use present tense consistently, correct prepositions and articles, and combine clauses with 'but' for clarity.

× Yeah, I, uh, like to see more parks in my city. Recently there is a new park newly open, uh, uh, far from my home. So I, I really this park was park is my pocket at least to visit there and spend their time and.

✓ Yeah, I would like to see more parks in my city. Recently a new park opened far from my home, and I really want to visit that park to spend time there.

'There is' and tense issue (ID 3 and 7): use past tense 'opened' for a recent event or present perfect 'has opened' depending on context; 'newly open' is incorrect form (ID 9/10). Sentence structure errors (ID 26): 'I really this park was park is my pocket' is ungrammatical. Pronoun and possessive errors (ID 12): 'their time' should be 'time there' or 'my time'. Suggestion: use 'a new park opened' or 'a new park has opened', replace awkward phrases with 'I really want to visit that park' and 'spend time there'.

× Yeah, there there are so many parks in my bucket list to visit in my future because the parks are parks are really give me peace and I enjoy a lot in your parks. And so in my future I would like to visit parks and spend my free time by walking and meeting.

✓ Yeah, there are many parks on my bucket list to visit in the future because parks really give me peace and I enjoy them a lot. In the future, I would like to visit parks and spend my free time walking and meeting friends.

Subject-verb agreement and repetition (ID 27 and 26): remove duplicate words 'there there' and 'parks are parks are'. Preposition and article errors (ID 11 and 22): use 'on my bucket list' not 'in my bucket list'. Verb and pronoun errors (ID 12 and 6): 'give me peace' is okay but follow with 'I enjoy them' instead of 'I enjoy a lot in your parks' (incorrect pronoun 'your'). Gerund/noun usage (ID 8/10): 'spend my free time by walking and meeting' is awkward; use 'by walking and meeting friends' or 'walking and meeting friends'. Suggestion: eliminate repetitions, correct prepositions, use 'on my bucket list', replace 'your parks' with 'parks' or 'them', and specify 'meeting friends' for clarity.