公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (use past tense: liked/enjoyed; articles: the/a; word order). Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Every morning my cousins and local friends and I would go to the park together, and we especially enjoyed swinging and playing games. Those visits were a highlight of my childhood because we spent hours running around and laughing.

建議: Make a clear contrast between past and present using linking words (e.g., 'now', 'whereas', 'because'). Use correct tense and phrasing (give → gives; for me, not for mine). Be specific about what you do and why it helps you. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid vague endings.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but for a different reason now. Whereas childhood visits were about fun and games, I go to parks now to relax and clear my mind by walking and enjoying the greenery.

建議: Answer directly and include specific benefits and examples. Use linking phrases (for example, also, because) and correct phrasing (gives peace and access to nature; people come for morning exercise). Avoid awkward constructions and keep sentences concise.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide peace and access to nature. For example, many people use parks for morning exercise and jogging, which improves health and creates a friendlier community atmosphere.

建議: Be specific about the park type and give reasons and a brief example. Use proper conditional phrasing and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct collocations (adventure park, enjoy being in nature).

範例: In the future I would like to visit an adventure park because I enjoy activities like zip-lining and obstacle courses. For instance, an adventure park set in a forest would let me try exciting activities while being surrounded by nature.

× Yes, of course I like going parks.

✓ Yes, of course I liked going to parks.

The context asks about childhood (past), so the verb tense should be past simple. Also 'going parks' is missing the preposition 'to' and 'parks' is plural which is fine. Use 'liked' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits: 'I liked going to parks.'

× When I was young I literally enjoy going park.

✓ When I was young I literally enjoyed going to parks.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was young') so the verb should be past tense 'enjoyed'. 'Going park' needs the preposition 'to' and 'parks' should be plural to indicate general habit. 'Literally' is often unnecessary here; consider removing if not intended literally. Suggestion: 'When I was young I enjoyed going to parks.'

× In the morning my all the locality friends and cousins came together and we went to park.

✓ In the mornings all my local friends and cousins came together and we went to the park.

Word order and choice are incorrect: 'my all the locality friends' should be 'all my local friends'. 'In the morning' as a habitual past action is better as 'In the mornings'. Also 'went to park' needs the definite article 'the' for a specific park. Suggestion: 'In the mornings all my local friends and cousins came together and we went to the park.'

× Enjoy the swings there.

✓ We enjoyed the swings there.

As a standalone sentence about past events, it needs a subject and past-tense verb: 'We enjoyed the swings there.' The original is an imperative or fragment; add subject and past tense to match context. Suggestion: 'We enjoyed the swings there.'

× Still I like to go park because that give me a piece of mind now.

✓ I still like to go to the park because it gives me peace of mind now.

Mix of tenses and missing preposition/article: 'Still I like to go park' should be 'I still like to go to the park'. 'That give' should be 'it gives' to agree in number and person. 'A piece of mind' is incorrect idiom; use 'peace of mind'. Suggestion: 'I still like to go to the park because it gives me peace of mind.'

× In my childhood it was an enjoyment thing, but now it's a peaceful thing for mine, where you can go and walk around, see the nature clearly and it will look.

✓ In my childhood it was a fun activity, but now it's a peaceful place where you can walk around, see nature clearly, and relax.

Awkward nouns and pronouns: 'enjoyment thing' -> 'fun activity'; 'for mine' is incorrect -> omit or 'for me'; 'see the nature' -> 'see nature'; 'it will look' is unclear, replace with 'relax' or 'enjoy the view'. Maintain present tense for current habit. Suggestion: 'In my childhood it was a fun activity, but now it's a peaceful place where you can walk around, see nature clearly, and relax.'

× Of course I would like to see parks in my city because it gives peace and nature.

✓ Of course I would like to have more parks in my city because they provide peace and green space.

The sentence is understandable but 'see parks' is odd; better 'have more parks'. 'It gives peace and nature' has wrong subject agreement and word choice: use plural 'they' and 'provide peace and green space' for clarity. Suggestion: 'Of course I would like to have more parks in my city because they provide peace and green space.'

× Also when in morning we look around and we can see lots of people made for the morning classes enjoying jogging.

✓ Also, in the mornings when we look around we can see lots of people doing morning exercises or jogging.

Word order and verb forms are wrong: 'when in morning' -> 'in the mornings when'; 'people made for the morning classes enjoying jogging' is ungrammatical. Use 'people doing morning exercises or jogging.' Suggestion: 'Also, in the mornings when we look around we can see lots of people doing morning exercises or jogging.'

× There can be very different kinds of park, but if you want to go in future, I would like to go adventure park because I like adventures there.

✓ There can be many different kinds of parks, but in the future I would like to go to an adventure park because I enjoy adventurous activities there.

Article and plural issues: 'kinds of park' -> 'kinds of parks' or 'parks'; 'go in future' -> 'in the future'; missing 'to' before 'an adventure park'; 'I like adventures there' -> 'I enjoy adventurous activities there.' Suggestion: 'There can be many different kinds of parks, but in the future I would like to go to an adventure park because I enjoy adventurous activities there.'

× So you can enjoy adventure in greenery.

✓ So you can enjoy adventures in a green setting.

Phrase 'enjoy adventure in greenery' is awkward: use plural 'adventures' and 'in a green setting' or 'in nature.' Suggestion: 'So you can enjoy adventures in a green setting.'

× That will be a great option and I will love to enjoy in green.

✓ That would be a great option and I would love to enjoy being in the greenery.

Modal consistency: earlier conditional 'would' fits future hypothetical. 'Enjoy in green' is incorrect; use 'enjoy being in the greenery' or 'enjoy the green surroundings.' Suggestion: 'That would be a great option and I would love to enjoy being in the greenery.'