公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise: state a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, correct verb forms, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking phrase for clarity.

範例: Yes. I enjoyed going to parks as a child because I liked exercising there. For example, I often played soccer with my friends in the evenings, which kept me active and happy.

建議: Improve grammar and organization: begin with a clear statement, use correct tense and verbs, and give one or two specific activities with linking words (e.g., "in the mornings"/"in the evenings").

範例: Yes, I still like going to parks. In the mornings I walk for about two hours to exercise, and in the evenings I sit and read my favorite book, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

建議: Be specific and use clearer vocabulary: state your opinion, then give concrete reasons and examples. Avoid vague phrasing and improve word choice (e.g., "people enjoy activities such as...").

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they give people space to relax and exercise. For example, families could read, have picnics, or play small group games like badminton or frisbee.

建議: Answer directly and coherently: name the park, explain why you want to go with specific reasons, and avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words like "because" or "so".

範例: Yes, I especially want to spend more time in the park near my house because it is convenient and peaceful. When I feel bored at home, I can go there to sit, read, or take a short walk to refresh my mind.

× Yes, I like, uh, go to parks as, uh, when I was a child because I love to some practice, uh, sorry, some exercise, uh, in the park and uh, at the evening, uh, especially, uh, I would do.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I loved to do some exercise in the park, especially in the evenings.

The student mixed present and past tenses. The question asks about childhood, so past tense is required. Use 'liked' and 'loved' (past simple) and the gerund 'going' after 'liked'. Use 'do some exercise' rather than 'to some practice' and 'in the evenings' for correct time expression and plural. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past) for past experiences; use gerunds after verbs like 'like'; use natural collocations ('do exercise', 'in the evenings').

× Yes, of course I would that because I, I would at the morning, uh, to work around 2 hours and the evening, uh, I would sit and open my favorite book and start to read, which that helped me to relax and make my mind.

✓ Yes, of course I do, because I go in the morning to walk for around two hours, and in the evening I sit, open my favorite book and start to read, which helps me to relax and clear my mind.

The student overused 'would' incorrectly for habitual actions; use present simple for current habits. 'Work' is likely 'walk' or 'exercise' — corrected to 'walk'. Use 'helps' (present simple) to match present habit. 'Make my mind' is unidiomatic; use 'clear my mind'. Suggestions: use present simple for regular habits (I go, I sit), avoid unnecessary 'would' for present routines, and use correct collocations ('clear my mind').

× Of course, yes, that wish that helps many people do what they favorite such as reading book work or maybe make some small games between together.

✓ Of course. Yes, I wish there were more; that would help many people do what they enjoy, such as reading books, working, or maybe playing small games together.

Multiple issues: use conditional/modal 'would' to express hypothetical help; 'wish' needs a clause (I wish there were more). Use 'enjoy' instead of 'favorite' and plural 'books'. Use 'playing' for activities and 'together' after verb. Suggestions: use correct structure for wishes about the present (I wish there were...), use 'would' for results, and use gerunds for activities ('reading', 'working', 'playing').

× Of course, yes, uh, the park near my house, uh, which that uh, helped me to go in anytime that I went to go, uh, at the same time, umm, that's helped me. If I feel very boring from my home, I go just, I go out and sit.

✓ Of course. The park near my house helps me because I can go there anytime. If I feel very bored at home, I just go out and sit there.

Tense and word choice errors: use present simple 'helps' for a general truth about the nearby park. 'Which that' is redundant; use a simple clause. 'Feel very boring' is incorrect; use 'feel very bored'. 'From my home' should be 'at home'. Simplify repetition ('I go just, I go out' -> 'I just go out'). Suggestions: use present simple for habitual truths, choose correct adjective ('bored' not 'boring'), and avoid redundant words.