公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Speak with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses, and concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (e.g., verb forms, articles, and word order). Use one or two specific details about activities you did at the park and why you enjoyed them. Keep your response to no more than five sentences and link ideas with simple connectors (for example, “because,” “so,” or “and”).

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there at weekends, and I used to play on the swings and have picnics with my friends. Because I enjoyed being outdoors and running around, I felt very happy and excited every time we visited.

建議: Give a direct answer first (yes/no) and then explain briefly using correct tense and linking words. Be specific about current constraints (study, work, busy schedule) and offer one short comment about how you feel or what you miss. Avoid awkward phrasing like “go growing up.”

範例: Not as much as before. Since I grew up I have a busy schedule with school and work, so I rarely have time to visit parks. I miss the fresh air and relaxing there when I have a free weekend.

建議: Start with a clear opinion (“Yes” or “No”) and give two specific benefits of more parks using linking words (“because,” “for example,” “so”). Use correct noun phrases and verb forms (e.g., “there would be more trees,” “people could exercise”). Avoid filler words and repetition.

範例: Yes, I would. More parks would mean more trees and cleaner air, and people would have pleasant places to meet and talk. For example, families could exercise and children could play outdoors instead of staying on their phones.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason. If unsure, say so then offer a realistic expectation or preference. Use correct grammar (future tense: “will have” or “might not have”) and avoid unrelated topics unless you clearly connect them (e.g., urban development can reduce green space). Be specific about the type of park you would like to visit in the future.

範例: I'm not sure if new parks will be built in the future because the city is growing quickly. However, I would like to visit a large urban park with walking paths and lakes if one becomes available, since those spaces help people relax and enjoy nature.

× Yes, I did. I really love going to the park once I was a child like my my friend, my parents.

✓ Yes, I did. I really loved going to the park when I was a child with my friends and my parents.

The speaker is referring to past habit, so the past simple tense 'loved' is required instead of present 'love'. 'Once I was a child' is ungrammatical for time phrase; use 'when I was a child'. 'Like my my friend, my parents' is unclear and should be 'with my friends and my parents' to show accompaniment. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits and clear prepositional phrases for accompaniment.

× My parents are always take me to the park when I was a child in the weekend because if they don't teach lead me to there, I will really, really sad.

✓ My parents always took me to the park on weekends when I was a child because if they hadn't taken me there, I would have been very sad.

Multiple errors: 'are always take' mixes present continuous and base verb; past habitual action requires past simple 'always took'. 'In the weekend' should be 'on weekends'. 'If they don't teach lead me to there' is incorrect verb choice and tense; for past conditional use 'if they hadn't taken me there'. Result clause about feeling should use past conditional 'I would have been very sad'. Suggestion: Use past simple for habitual past actions, 'on weekends' for recurring weekends, and past perfect in third conditional if describing unreal past conditions.

× Hmm I think it's not because when I go growing up there have many things to do.

✓ Hmm I don't think so because as I grew up there were many things to do.

The response refers to change over time from childhood to present, so 'I don't think so' is present simple for current opinion; 'when I go growing up' is ungrammatical — use 'as I grew up' or 'when I grew up'. 'there have many things to do' needs past tense 'there were many things to do' to match 'grew up'. Suggestion: Match tense of time clause ('grew up') with past verb in main clause ('were'). Use 'I don't think so' for current disagreement.

× Like I need to go into school going to work and don't have a time go there anymore.

✓ For example, I needed to go to school and then to work, so I didn't have time to go there anymore.

Run-on and incorrect verb forms: 'go into school going to work' mixes forms; separate events with conjunctions and use past tense 'needed' and 'didn't have time'. 'a time go there' should be 'time to go there'. Suggestion: Use clear sequence words and correct infinitive 'time to do something'.

× I think so because if have many parks in my city, there's many trees, there will have many trees, many, uh, many places to people go there to talk to and stay away from the mobile phone, uh, computer and they will doing exercise.

✓ I think so because if there were many parks in my city, there would be many trees and many places for people to go to talk and stay away from their mobile phones and computers, and they would exercise.

Conditional and modal errors: The speaker mixes forms. For a hypothetical present condition use second conditional: 'if there were..., there would be...'. 'places to people go there to talk to' should be 'places for people to go to talk'. 'stay away from the mobile phone, computer' needs plural possessive 'their mobile phones and computers'. 'they will doing exercise' is wrong form; use 'they would exercise'. Suggestion: Use correct conditional structure (if + past subjunctive, would + base verb), proper prepositions ('for people to go to'), and correct verb form after modal.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

The question is acceptable but the student's intended answer later uses conditional; to match polite future interest use 'would like' rather than simple 'want'. However this item may be considered fine; suggested correction improves formality and clarity. Suggestion: Use 'would like' when asking about preferences for the future.

× I don't know in the future will have park because now nowadays AI is more and the city is more growing up and then I don't know in the future is will have a park too.

✓ I don't know if there will be parks in the future because AI is advancing and the city is growing, so I'm not sure there will still be parks.

Multiple issues: word order for questions/clauses — 'in the future will have park' should be 'if there will be parks in the future' or 'whether there will be parks'. 'now nowadays AI is more' is vague; 'AI is advancing' is clearer. 'the city is more growing up' should be 'the city is growing'. Use 'parks' plural and proper modal 'will be'. Suggestion: Use 'if/whether' for indirect questions, correct subject-verb order, pluralize countable nouns, and choose clear verbs like 'advancing' and 'growing'.