公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently, correct infinitive forms, and make sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Also use a linking word if you add extra information.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I loved playing on the swings and exploring the trees because being outdoors made me feel free and happy.

建議: Use correct verb forms and natural expressions (e.g., 'it relaxes me' or 'it makes me feel happy'). Give one specific reason and a short example to support your statement, using a linking word for coherence.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. They relax me and make me feel happier; for example, I often sit by the pond to read and unwind after work.

建議: Correct modal and article use ('I would like', 'more parks'), and improve clarity by avoiding unclear phrases ('the beginning order'). Provide one clear reason with a specific effect and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are only a few now. For example, new parks would give residents more places to exercise and relax, which would improve our wellbeing.

建議: Use natural phrasing and correct grammar: 'I would like to visit many parks in the future' and avoid repetition. State a specific plan or type of park you want to visit and use a conditional sentence correctly.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit many parks in the future. If the city builds new botanical gardens, I will definitely visit them to see different plant species and take photographs.

× Yes, I like to going to park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The sentence describes a past habit, so the past tense 'liked' is required (Present tense issue). 'Like to going' is incorrect: use 'liked going' or 'liked to go'. Also 'park' should be plural 'parks' or use 'the park' depending on meaning. Suggestion: say 'I liked going to parks' for general childhood habit.

× It's really fun and it's keep natural and make me happy.

✓ It was really fun, it kept me close to nature, and it made me happy.

Multiple article and verb form issues: the context is past so use past verbs 'was', 'kept', 'made' (Past tense issue). 'Keep natural' is ungrammatical; use 'kept me close to nature' or 'kept things natural'. Also missing commas and conjunctions for clarity. Suggestion: use correct past verbs and a clear phrase for 'close to nature'.

× Yes, I still like going to park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks.

Talking about present habit requires present simple 'like' which is correct, but 'park' needs an article or plural. Use 'going to parks' for general visits or 'going to the park' for specific. This is an Incorrect use of articles/ Singular and plural issue combined; here adjusted as Present tense issue focused on tense and plurality.

× It relax me and feel me happy and give me a positive energy.

✓ It relaxes me, makes me feel happy, and gives me positive energy.

Subject-verb agreement and verb forms are wrong: with singular subject 'it' use third person singular verbs 'relaxes' and 'gives' (Third person singular issue). 'Feel me happy' is incorrect order; use 'makes me feel happy'. 'A positive energy' is unneeded article: use 'positive energy'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and natural collocations.

× Yes, I could like to see more park in my city because there aren't many at the moment.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there aren't many at the moment.

'Could like' is incorrect; use 'would like' to express desire (Modal verb usage). 'Park' should be plural 'parks' to match 'many'. Suggestion: use 'would like' for wishes and ensure noun plurality matches quantifier.

× I've only been to one or two, but they are clean and peace and the beginning order and help me relax and recharge my energy.

✓ I've only been to one or two, but they are clean and peaceful; they are well maintained and help me relax and recharge my energy.

Several word choice and adjective issues: 'peace' should be adjective 'peaceful'. 'The beginning order' is ungrammatical—likely meant 'well-organized' or 'well maintained'. Use parallel structure and correct adjectives. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives ('peaceful', 'well maintained') and keep consistent sentence structure.

× Yes, I could like to go many park in my future.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit many parks in the future.

Again 'could like' is incorrect; use 'would like' for desire (Modal verb usage). 'Many park' should be 'many parks' (Singular and plural issue). Use 'visit' for natural verb collocation and 'in the future' or 'in my future' -> 'in the future'. Suggestion: 'I would like to visit many parks in the future.'

× If they build, I will definitely definitely I will show to.

✓ If they are built, I will definitely go and visit them.

The original has word order and missing objects: 'If they build' lacks subject—use passive 'If they are built' or 'If the city builds them'. Repetition 'definitely definitely' is unnecessary. 'I will show to' is incorrect; use 'go and visit them' or 'I will definitely visit them.' Suggestion: use clear conditional structure and include correct objects and verbs.