公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer grammatically correct, direct, and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child."), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because I enjoyed trying different rides and games. However, I often felt frustrated because some attractions were too crowded or had age restrictions, so I couldn't try everything I wanted.

建議: Give a clear, concise answer and use correct tense and linking phrases. Begin with a direct statement about your current preference, then briefly explain why and add a conditional sentence if relevant. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Not really — I don't go to parks much now because my interests have changed as I've grown older. However, if I had the chance to try new attractions or visit a particularly beautiful park, I would go.

建議: Answer directly and provide specific, relevant reasons. Avoid vague or unrelated statements. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and concise phrasing. If mentioning problems in the country, clarify how parks would help (e.g., provide green space, improve well-being).

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would provide green spaces for families and improve residents' mental health. For example, parks could offer playgrounds for children and quiet areas for people to relax, which would make the city more livable.

建議: Be specific about the park and explain why you want to visit it using clear descriptive language. Name the park correctly if possible (e.g., Gardens by the Bay) and give one or two reasons with linking words (because, for example). Keep it natural and concise.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit Gardens by the Bay in Singapore because the futuristic gardens and Supertree Grove look incredible. For example, I especially want to see the Cloud Forest dome because of its tall indoor waterfall and unique plant displays.

× Yes I do when I was 8 I want to try every single things stuffs but my hate my things can't require to play all the games.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was 8, I wanted to try every single thing, but I couldn't play all the games I wanted.

Mix of present and past tenses and several grammar errors: 'I do' should be past 'I did' to match 'when I was 8'; 'I want' should be 'I wanted' (past tense); 'every single things stuffs' is uncountable/misuse — use 'every single thing' (singular countable); 'my hate my things can't require to play all the games' is ungrammatical — intended meaning is 'I couldn't play all the games I wanted.' Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for childhood memories, use correct singular/plural forms, and simplify sentence structure.

× Uh, basically I didn't 'cause now I'm growing up and I'm not interested about that. However, if I had the chance to go and try some new things, I will do.

✓ Uh, basically I don't anymore because I'm growing up and I'm not interested in that. However, if I had the chance to go and try some new things, I would do it.

Tense mismatch: 'I didn't' is incorrect for present state; use 'I don't anymore' or 'I don't anymore like that.' 'Not interested about' should be 'not interested in' (preposition error). Second sentence is a hypothetical contrary-to-fact condition: use 'would' not 'will' after 'if I had the chance.' Suggestion: use correct present tense for current habits, correct preposition 'in', and 'would' for hypothetical actions.

× Yes, that is what I want to see in my country 'cause my country has too many explosion and enormous issues that seems to be hard to live in here. So I want to see more parks in my city and country.

✓ Yes, that is what I want to see in my country because my country has too many explosions and enormous issues that make it hard to live here. So I want to see more parks in my city and country.

Preposition and agreement errors: 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'Too many explosion' needs plural 'explosions.' 'Issues that seems' must agree with plural subject: 'issues that make.' 'Hard to live in here' word order improved to 'hard to live here.' Suggestion: use correct plural forms, subject-verb agreement, and appropriate prepositions/word order.

× Yes, if I remember it correctly in Singapore, so enormous and excellent, amazing parks existing, which is like Avatars city, like movie, yeah.

✓ Yes, if I remember correctly, Singapore has enormous, excellent, and amazing parks that seem like a city from the movie Avatar.

Sentence is fragmented and word order is confused. 'If I remember it correctly in Singapore' should be 'if I remember correctly, Singapore has...'. 'Parks existing' is wrong; use 'parks that exist' or simply 'parks.' Comparison 'like Avatars city, like movie' should be 'like a city from the movie Avatar.' Suggestion: rearrange into a clear main clause, use correct relative clause 'that' and improve comparison wording; maintain proper commas and adjective order.