公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (e.g., articles and verb forms).

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, when I visited local parks I felt calm and more confident because nature helped me relax, so I often asked my parents to take me there.

建議: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Give one clear reason and one specific example of frequency or recent visit. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' but not repeatedly.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they give me the same calm feeling I had as a child. For instance, I try to visit a nearby park at least once a week to read or take a walk.

建議: Be specific and correct word choice: say 'parks in my city' not 'parts'. Reduce filler words (uh, like) and give a reason plus a suggested benefit of more parks. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so'.

範例: Yes, I would definitely like more parks in my city because most green areas are wildlife reserves and not open to the public. More public parks would provide safe recreational spaces for families and improve community wellbeing.

建議: Keep it concise: state the park clearly, give one specific reason and a brief personal connection. Avoid repeating 'really' and use smooth linking words like 'because' or 'as'.

範例: I'd love to visit Lumpini Park in Bangkok because I lived in Thailand for two years and never had the chance to go. In photos it looks peaceful and beautiful, and I would enjoy spending an afternoon there relaxing and people-watching.

× I did like to go to parks as a child because as a child I was always very introverted.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child because I was always very introverted.

Using 'did like to go' is unnecessary emphatic past construction. Use simple past 'liked' and gerund 'going to parks' for habitual past actions. Also remove repeated 'as a child' to avoid redundancy.

× But then whenever I went to parks or in nature, I always felt like I could express myself.

✓ But whenever I went to parks or into nature, I always felt that I could express myself.

Replace 'or in nature' with 'into nature' for correct preposition use and change 'felt like' to 'felt that' for clearer formal expression. 'Whenever' with past tense 'went' is correct.

× And then I felt like a strange sense of calm whenever I went to park.

✓ And then I felt a strange sense of calm whenever I went to the park.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to parks in general habitual context; 'a strange sense' is correct without 'like'. Use 'felt a strange sense of calm' rather than 'felt like a strange sense'.

× So I would always beg my parents to take me to the parks when I was a kid.

✓ So I would always beg my parents to take me to the park when I was a kid.

When speaking generally about visiting parks as a child, 'the park' or 'parks' can be used, but 'take me to the parks' suggests multiple parks; 'take me to the park' is more natural for habitual visits. Also keep tense consistent past habitual 'would beg'.

× I do still like going to parks because this lingering feeling of calmness when I was a kid still stuck to me to this day.

✓ I still like going to parks because the lingering feeling of calmness from my childhood has stuck with me to this day.

Mixing 'do still like' is wordy—use 'still like'. 'When I was a kid' should be expressed as 'from my childhood' and 'stuck to me' should be 'has stuck with me' (present perfect) to indicate a continuing state up to now.

× So whenever I go to parks, I feel the nostalgia of being calm when I was a kid.

✓ So whenever I go to parks, I feel nostalgic about the calm I had as a child.

Use 'feel nostalgic' instead of 'feel the nostalgia of being calm'. Express 'when I was a kid' as 'as a child' for natural phrasing and maintain present tense 'go' with present feeling 'feel'.

× So I do really like going to parks even though, and I do frequently go to parks even though.

✓ So I really do like going to parks, and I frequently go to them.

Original sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('even though' without contrast). Remove 'even though' or complete the contrast. Use 'go to them' to avoid repetition and make the sentence grammatical.

× Yes, I would definitely like to see more parts of my city, specially because, uh, in Bhutan, there's not many parks where people can go.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to see more parks in my city, especially because in Bhutan there are not many parks where people can go.

Use 'especially' not 'specially'. 'See more parts of my city' is odd—likely meant 'see more parks'. Use 'there are not many' (plural) instead of 'there's not many' for subject-verb agreement.

× There are many like parks for animal reserves, but then like they're, they're only like a few parks where people can actually go.

✓ There are many parks that are animal reserves, but there are only a few parks where people can actually go.

Remove filler 'like' repetitions and correct structure: ensure plural 'parks' matches verb 'are'. Use 'that are animal reserves' for clarity and avoid double 'they're, they're'.

× But then that's why I really, really like there to be more parks.

✓ That's why I really, really want there to be more parks.

Use 'want there to be' rather than 'like there to be' to express desire. Original word order is awkward; 'want there to be more parks' is the correct cleft construction with 'there be' as existential.

× I would really love to go to the Thailand Lumpini Park, which I've heard about and since I've lived in Thailand for two years I always wanted to go but I never got an opportunity to go.

✓ I would really love to go to Lumpini Park in Thailand, which I've heard about. Since I lived in Thailand for two years, I've always wanted to go but I never had the opportunity.

Place 'in Thailand' after park name for natural word order. Use 'since I lived' (past) or 'having lived' to link experience; 'I've always wanted' (present perfect) with 'I never had the opportunity' (past perfect/simple past) clarifies that the opportunity did not occur.

× So I've always really wanted to go to the park cause in photos it seemed very relaxing and very beautiful and I really, really want to go in the future.

✓ So I've always wanted to go to the park because in photos it seems very relaxing and beautiful, and I really want to go in the future.

Use 'because' not informal 'cause'. Match tense: 'photos it seems' (present) when referring to appearance in photos; maintain consistency and reduce repetition of 'really'.