公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating words and use past tense when talking about childhood (e.g., "liked"). Use linking words such as "usually" or "often" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents and siblings, and we used to have picnics and play games together.

建議: Use correct simple present tense and clearer time expressions. Begin with a direct statement, then add specific frequency and who you go with. Use linking words like "also" or "because" properly and avoid unnecessary repetition.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go there twice a day, in the morning and evening, usually with my uncle and aunt, because the fresh air helps me feel relaxed.

建議: Provide a clear opinion and give a specific reason. Remove filler words (uh) and use appropriate grammar: conditional or future forms correctly. Explain one concrete benefit (e.g., cleaner air, more recreation areas) and link it using "because" or "so that".

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would improve air quality and provide green spaces for people to exercise and relax.

建議: Clarify which park you mean and use future tense correctly. Give a brief reason why you want to visit that park and avoid unrelated phrases like "thank you." Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Moor Park in the future because it has many trees and walking trails, which I think would be great for my health and relaxation.

× Yes, I like to going to park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The sentence mixes present tense with a past time reference 'as a child.' Use past tense 'liked' and correct verb form 'going' without 'to' after 'like.' Also use plural 'parks' or 'the park' for natural English. Suggestion: say 'I liked going to parks as a child.'

× When I am child I am going with my family also and we go.

✓ When I was a child I went to the park with my family.

The sentence uses present tense 'am' and 'am going' but the time frame is past ('When I was a child'). Change to past simple 'was' and 'went.' Omit unnecessary 'also' and repetitive 'we go.' Use article 'a' before 'child.'

× I am going with my younger brother, sister and elder brother sister also and my mother and father.

✓ I used to go with my younger sister, older brother and sister, and my parents.

The original mixes present progressive with past context. Use 'used to' or past simple 'went' for habitual past actions. Use correct terms 'younger sister,' 'older brother,' and 'parents' instead of 'mother and father.' Also add commas for clarity.

× I am also like to going to park now and I am going two times morning and evening.

✓ I also like going to the park now, and I go twice, in the morning and in the evening.

For current habits use present simple 'like' and 'go.' Remove 'to' before 'going' after 'like.' Use 'twice' and specify 'in the morning and in the evening.'

× Also I am going to park with my uncle, aunt and when I am going to the park I feel fresh.

✓ I also go to the park with my uncle and aunt, and when I go to the park I feel refreshed.

Use present simple 'go' for habitual actions. Include both 'uncle and aunt' with 'and.' 'Feel fresh' is unnatural; use 'feel refreshed.' Also remove extra 'to' before 'park' when context requires article: 'to the park.'

× Yes, I am like to see more park in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

The speaker is expressing a desire now; use the modal 'would like' plus base verb. Use plural 'parks' or 'more parks' and include 'would' for polite preference.

× Uh, it is a better for our city uh, because uh, when uh, more tree will be assembled in the park, uh, the we get.

✓ It would be better for our city because when more trees are planted in the parks, we benefit.

Use 'would be better' to express hypothetical improvement. 'Tree' should be plural 'trees.' 'Will be assembled' is incorrect; use 'are planted' (passive with correct verb). 'Parks' plural fits 'more parks.' Remove filler 'uh' and correct 'we get' to 'we benefit' or 'we get cleaner air.'

× Yes, I am a more.

✓ Yes, I would like that.

The original 'I am a more' is ungrammatical. Interpret intended meaning as agreement or desire; use 'I would like that' or 'Yes, I would.'

× I am born to Moorpark in the future.

✓ I would like to go to Moorpark in the future.

'Am born' is wrong for future intention. Use 'would like to go' or 'I plan to go' for future intention. Also ensure correct place name 'Moorpark' and preposition 'to.'

× This is best for our lungs and we can breathe very thank you.

✓ This would be good for our lungs and would help us breathe more easily. Thank you.

Use 'would be good' for hypothetical benefit. 'Breathe very' is incorrect; use adverb 'more easily.' Add polite 'Thank you' separately. Ensure modal consistency 'would help.'